RENKU: linked collaborative verses: TRIPARSHVA 18th verse & Call for 19!

Sabaki (lead poet) - Linda Papanicolaou


TRIPARSHVA RENKU - Post 15 SABAKI: L I N D A P A P A N I C O L A O U



POST: Choice of verse 18 & Call for verse 19

16th JULY 2022

CHOICE OF VERSE 18


This is the second occurrence of Monsoon in our renku. When a topic repeats, the task is to make it different—explore different aspects. To refresh our memories, here are verses 8 and 9, which were our two monsoon verses in the Ha:


a pied crested cuckoo

on a telephone wire


after the downpour

she squeezes our clothes

under the banyan tree


Their topic categories were animal and weather/ plant. When a topic or season repeats, the task is to make it different—explore different aspects. This would mean using kigo in the other categories of the saijiki. At this point in the renku, as we’re nearing the end, It can be our last chance to talk about some of these categories that we haven’t covered already.


For this reason, I am delighted to bring Kanjini on board with her wonderful depiction of rice planting:


the whisper of falling leaves

rolls into a pyramid / Amrutha V. Prabhu


trekking on Himalayas

when layers

of our false selves peel off / Kala Ramesh


the synchronized silhouettes

of planting rice in paradise / Kanjini Dev



In choosing rice planting as her kigo, Kanjini has given us the topic category of human occupations, which we have not had all in the renku until now. The way the verse links to Kala’s Himalayas Verse by transforming the rising pyramidal silhouettes of those mountains into the bending silhouettes of people planting a rice paddy figures is inspired. The synchronized movements of the workers and the rhyme in the second line suggest that they’re singing a work song to coordinate appointments. I can’t help but be reminded of Basho’s hokku about rice planting songs (https://breathhaiku.wordpress.com/tag/basho-rice-planting-haiku/).


Thank you very much, Kanjini, and to everyone who posted offers. We are one verse nearer to the finale of our renku.



CALL FOR VERSE 19

Verse 19 is the last non-seasonal verse in the Renku. The requirements are:


* 3 lines, non-seasonal

* person or place (your choice)

* As always link to the previous verse, and shift away from the leap over verse. Here they are again:

trekking on Himalayas

when layers

of our false selves peel off


the synchronized silhouettes

of planting rice in paradise



Before you post, do a bit of self-critique. Have you checked (as best you can) that your verse follows the required criteria? How does it link to the previous verse? How does it shift away from the leap-over verse? What new topics or things does it introduce to the renku?


INSTRUCTIONS FOR SUBMITTING


Each participant may offer two submissions, posted together in the same comment, with your name as you would like it to appear in the renku. Instructions for submitting remain as last time.

The deadline is 48 hours from now. We follow Indian Standard Time (IST). This POST will go up on 16 July at 6 A.M. So on 18 July at 6 A.M, the window closes (IST). All the 19th verse offers must be posted on this thread BEFORE 6 A.M on 18 July.



THE RENKU SO FAR


1. Jo

house warming …

all the flavours of summer

on a dining table / Firdaus Parvi


a dozen ripened mangoes

from the neighbour next door / Kala Ramesh


the gleeful shouts

of street kids rolling

a bicycle tyre / Priti Aisola


an airplane through the clouds

in an indigo twilight / Margherita Petriccione


so close

the snow moon

envelops the field / Angiola Inglese


crackling silence as we bend

over the chess board / Sushama Kapur


2. Ha

caparisoned elephants

raising their trumpets amid

the village prayer beats / Lakshmi Iyer


a pied crested cuckoo

on a telephone wire / Marcie Wessels


after the downpour

she squeezes our clothes

under the banyan tree / Milan Rajkumar


a backlit craving races

into an embrace / Kavita Ratna


those dreams

of my first love

once again / Arvinder Kaur


the merry go round horse

stopped on a high note / Robert Kingston


a crick

in the neck

after Sistine Chapel / Sanjukta Asopa


shadows lengthen

into this new bite in the air / Sushama Kapur


a crick

in the neck

after Sistine Chapel / Sanjukta Asopa


shadows lengthen

into this new bite in the air / Sushama Kapur


moonbeams dipping

into a storm drain and a stream

with the same alacrity / Priti Aisola


the whisper of falling leaves

rolls into a pyramid / Amrutha V. Prabhu


3. Kyu


trekking on Himalayas

when layers

of our false selves peel off / Kala Ramesh


the synchronized silhouettes

of planting rice in paradise / Kanjini Devi


THE SCHEMA: NOTE ADJUSTMENTS IN VERSES 8-12 OF HA


Side one - Jo

hokku summer

wakiku summer

daisan non season

4 ns

5. winter moon

6 ns


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Side 2 - Ha

7 ns

8 monsoon

9 monsoon love

10 ns lv

11 ns lv

12. ns

13 ns

14 autumn

15 au moon

16 autumn

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Side 3 - Kyu


17 ns

18 monsoon

19 ns (we are here!!)

20 spring

21 sp blossom

ageku - sp


Links to our previous week: https://www.trivenihaikai.in/post/copy-of-renku-linked-collaborative-verses-triparshva-15-16-call-for-17


*** **** ***** LINKS TO RESOURCES:


The schema for our triparshva: https://www.trivenihaikai.in/post/renku-linked-collaborative-verses


URLs for online saijikis: https://www.trivenihaikai.in/post/renku-linked-collaborative-verses-triparshva-4-1


Kondo and Higginson, “Link and Shift, A Practical Guide to Renku Composition”: http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/Link_Shift.html


Ferris Gilli, “English Grammar: Variety in Renku”: https://sites.google.com/site/worldhaikureview2/whr-archives/grammar-in-renku


Richard Gilbert’s “Muki Saijiki”: https://gendaihaiku.com/research/kigo/05-muki-saijiki-TOC.htm

*** *** *** *** Linda, Thanks once again for leading us so beautifully.

Congratulations, Kanjini! _()_

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