haikaiTALKS: HAIKU STRUCTURE| a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Lev Hart 9th November 2024
haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
HAIKU STRUCTURE
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HAIKU STRUCTURE
In your first post, you are invited to provide two different ways of structuring the same words. Here are examples of the same words in different structures:
summer dawn
parrots swooping through
the sprinkler
parrots swooping
through the sprinkler
summer dawn
summer dawn parrots swooping through the sprinkler
parrots swooping through the sprinkler
summer dawn
summer
dawn
parrots sprinkler
swooping the
through
parrots
swooping
through
the
sprinkler
summer
dawn
In your second post, you are invited to perform the same experiment --- with a different set of words. Dare yourself to try a structure for the first time. At the end of the week, I will assume that the uppermost variation in each post is what you want sent to the editors. Remember the kigo. Avoid shopworn images. Strive for originality.
“A Dictionary of Haiku Classified by Season Words with Traditional and Modern Methods,” by Jane Reichhold:
indian subcontinent SAIJIKI:
The Five Hundred Essential Japanese Season Words:
The World Kigo Database:
The Yuki Teikei Haiku Season Word List:
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Thank you for doing this for us, Lev.
Members,
Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_
This is an exciting phase for haikaiTALKS! Have fun! Keep writing and commenting! _kala
#2
Raindrops on the poinsettia evenfall
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on the poinsettia
evenfall
Joanna Ashwell
UK
Feedback welcome
#2 Revised - thanks Lev frosted dawn
tracing the wind
with my glasses Sandip Chauhan, USA frosted dawn
i grip the monocle
to trace the wind
frosted dawn
i grip the monocle
to trace the
w i n d Sandip Chauhan, USA feedback welcome
#1
Edits, thanks to Lev:
trolley aisle
the back and forth
of spring sunbeams
back
and
forth
spring sunbeams
through the trolley aisle
Joanna Ashwell
UK
Feedback welcome
#1
trolley aisle
the back and forth
of a sunbeam
back
and
forth
sunbeams
through the trolley aisle
Joanna Ashwell
UK
Feedback welcome
#2 13/11
Revision 1 Thanks a lot Lev🌹
winter night
lone trees
date with stars
winter night
lone trees
date with stars
Fatma Zohra Habis/ Algeria
The original 🌺
winter night
maybe I'll find you
among the stars
among the stars
maybe I'll find you
winter night
feedback welcome 🌺
for some reason this only just showed up on the web site for me today Wednesday the 13 th
Hmmmm ....