writeALONG! 20th June
- Muskaan Ahuja
- Jun 20, 2023
- 1 min read
Updated: Jun 23, 2023
A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer
guest editor: Sangita Kalarickal
Cliche in Haiku
I am sure many poets (and editors) would agree that some words and phrases are very popular among people, and so also among poets. Explicit usage of words for the season (winter scene, summer sky, autumn colours) or overly used kigo (cherry blossoms, sakura, moon) or words like memory etc. It takes an exceptionally different juxtaposition to make the cliches work.
This week how about using lesser-used words or phrases to describe the season? Or perhaps use words in surprisingly different contexts.
crickets chirping
the white curtain full
of moonlight
--- K. Ramesh
rosemary blossoms
how twilight sneaks up
on the perfect day
---- Jim Chessing
fresh laundry...
the scent
of summer sun
(I know it's too late in the week, but will appreciate feedback if possible.)
I wanted to thank you all for writing in. This has been a wonderful journey so far. If the muse hasn't struck you, hope reading the superlative ku by all these wonderful haijin helps? It has motivated me defintely, so, thank you!
Next week is a light and fun one, hope your quills are ready!!
25/6
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Silent Valley
the moon lights
a hidden tree stump
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Feedback please
oooh, the cliches! Another interesting writeALONG, @sangita kalarickal
23/6
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dung-splattered street
the ek tara player tuning
a folk song
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feedback please