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Writer's pictureMuskaan Ahuja

writeALONG! 1st August

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Shloka Shankar


Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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While a haiku moment is considered sacrosanct by several practitioners of the form, sometimes using allusions and mythology can add a different dimension to the piece. Myth and literature go together but have you ever tried alluding to a Greek or Indian mythological character in your haiku/senryu? It could be serious or it could be tongue-in-cheek.

Here’s one that brilliantly uses the myth of Sisyphus in a modern, everyday “grind” context:


Monday morning coffee the strength of Sisyphus

– Joe McKeon


Which character will you pick this week? Brownie points if you can give it a contemporary spin/relevance.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Aug 04, 2023

How is this?


her narrative begins to tailwag :: Chinese dragon


Trying out Shloka's suggestion:


her storyline begins to tailwag Chinese dragon

But somehow I like this senryu as a sentence ku, instead of having a kire.

With the image showing the tail, I think it needs to be a one-line ku.

??


her storyline begins to tailwag :: Chinese dragon


Does it work? #1

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Shloka Shankar
Shloka Shankar
Aug 05, 2023
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I think this would work better as a tercet senryu.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Aug 04, 2023

Lovely to see you here, Shloka.

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 04, 2023

#2 feedback welcome


first school day Artemis wears a backpack


(Artemis is the protector of young children)

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 05, 2023
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Shloka,

Thank you!

There also is a sobering side to this ku as school shootings continue to be an American tragedy.

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Muskaan Ahuja
Muskaan Ahuja
Aug 03, 2023

This week’s prompt is truly fascinating, Shloka!

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 03, 2023

#2, revised


Laxman Rekha. . .

the de-colonisation

of ants


original


Laxman Rekha Chalk . . .

de-colonisation of ants

begins


Laxman Rekha Chalk is an anti-arthropoda chalk drawn to avoid the ants from attacking the household ingredients.

Feedback please. Is this good?

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 07, 2023
Replying to

Thanks Shloka. I thought so, but got a bit distracted.

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