A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer
guest editor: Billie Dee
Please note:
Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.
Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.
Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.
If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.
Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.
The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.
Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!
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Celebrating Triveni Haijin
Many of our fellow Trivenians are already karumi masters, whether they consciously employ the principle or not. These two poems, in particular, strike me as solidly informed by Bashō’s revisionist concept.
mosquito whine—
mom’s hand fan
picks up the pace
— Daipayan Nair
sunflower blooms—
a parrot pops seeds
for breakfast
— Neena Singh
Prompt: Take a stroll around your neighborhood. Jot down some random juxtapositions you notice along the way, then write several karumi-inspired poems based on your notes. Share two of them here and join our celebration of Triveni Haikai. This exercise is called a ginko walk.
Post 2
Revision:
bits of bread
moved by the wind—
a swooping sparrow
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a bit of bread
arriving with the wind
a swooping sparrow
Comments welcomed
Adelaide B. Shaw
USA
#2. 25/12/23
dhobhi ghat -
flowing with the suds
dhobhi geet
Nalini Shetty
India.
Dhobi Ghat, an outdoor laundry in Mumbai City.The rhythmic chant or song often sung by washermen while washing clothes is commonly known as a "dhobi song" or "dhobi geet."The songs often have a repetitive and melodious quality, helping the washers maintain a steady rhythm and make the task more enjoyable.
Feedback welcome
#2
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winter branches —
the many monuments
green leaves hide
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[2023.25.12…a]
Alfred Booth
Lyon, France
(feedback welcome)
to be featherlight on mother earth
sumaithangi
https://www.speakingtree.in/article/sumaithangi-the-load-bearing-stone
Kala Ramesh India #2 Feedback please
snow melt
bringing in a new season
of mud
Adelaide B. Shaw
USA
comments welcomed