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writeALONG! 16 January

Writer: Muskaan AhujaMuskaan Ahuja

Updated: Jan 16, 2024

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Aparna Pathak


Please note: 


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems (haiku/senryu) that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!

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One thing that I always try to keep in mind while writing haiku is that it should be about a moment that doesn't take more than a few seconds to experience. We all know that haiku is about  showing a visual and is never an interpretation of an experience.


reluctant

to place the last piece

of jigsaw

this rare moment in time

when I can see a solution

--- Keitha Keyes


Here is a beautiful poem to inspire you to write yours, that is your own experience from your daily routine.

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Padma Priya
21 ene 2024

#1

21-01-2024


waking up

I forget the dream…

the triviality of it all


Padma Priya

India

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
19 ene 2024

#2, 19/01 ( kolams - rangoli)


morning kolams

filling the curves and lines

with spring colours


Lakshmi Iyer, India

feedback please

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tanka anya
tanka anya
07 feb 2024
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Awesome in all respects, Lakshmi. love ya, a'ya

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Kanjini Devi
Kanjini Devi
19 ene 2024

Revision


sweaty brow dust on my feet from sand-bathing quails


#2 - 19/1/24


sweaty brow dust on my feet from sand bathing quails


Kanjini Devi, New Zealand

feedback appreciated

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tanka anya
tanka anya
07 feb 2024
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Hi Kanji, wonderful content in this one. A suggestion for you to contemplate swapping lines so that 'from' isn't on the end of line 2. All your same words though, like this:


sweaty brow--

from sand bathing quail

dust on my feet


Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think "quail" instead of plural. love ya, an'ya

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Baisali
Baisali
18 ene 2024

#2, 18/1/24


Edited: (with grateful thanks to@Lev Hart)


soap bubbles

for a moment I forget

the socks


Original:


soap bubbles

I forget about the socks

for a few seconds


~ Baisali Chatterjee Dutt

Kolkata, India


Feedback always welcome

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Kanjini Devi
Kanjini Devi
21 ene 2024
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The revision is brilliant!

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
17 ene 2024

17/1/24 2nd


rock tumbler

my rough edges polished

with prayer


Marilyn Ashbaugh, USA

feedback welcome

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
20 ene 2024
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Thank you, Padma!

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