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writeALONG! 14 November

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Ashish Narain


Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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In a poem of just three lines, every word counts. For this reason perhaps, repetition is a device

rarely used in haiku. Done right, however, I feel it can power a ku to greatness. Consider for

e.g.,


the spring sea rising

and falling, rising

and falling all day


--- Buson tr by Richard Haas



Should we try and see what we can make of repetition?

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Kalyani
Kalyani
Nov 22, 2023

#2


22.03.23


lashing and breaking

breaking and foaming

- stories in sea language


Kalyanee Arandhara


Feedback please

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
Nov 22, 2023

#2


reading again

the lines from you

re-reading farewell


Joanna Ashwell

UK


Feedback welcome


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mona bedi
mona bedi
Nov 20, 2023

Post #2

20.11.23


a rivulet —

into the river

into the ocean


Feedback appreciated:)

Mona Bedi

India

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
Nov 22, 2023
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This is so beautiful.

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Kalyani
Kalyani
Nov 20, 2023

November 20, 2023


night after night

i read a years-old page

in my inbox


Kalyanee


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#2 feedback welcome

17th November 2023


Revised (thank you, Kala and Bonnie)


full moon

after tree

after sea

the village temple

festival


Amoolya Kamalnath

India


Original:


full moon after tree after moon after tree after sea the village temple fest


Amoolya Kamalnath

India

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Thank you, Bonnie, for sharing your view!

I also resonate with this version.

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