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writeALONG! 11th July

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Marilyn Ashbaugh



Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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"The best haiku are barefoot; next, the sandaled; and least, those with shoes."


-- Speculations by Robert Spiess


Robert Spiess states the best haiku are barefoot, so let's walk barefoot along the shore.

What do you feel beneath your feet. . . anchored or uprooted? lost or found?

What do you see in your mind's eye? You as a child or someone/something else ?



lost. . .

I return home

to the sea


-- Marilyn Ashbaugh



Please share your poems with us!

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#2 feedback welcome


(On the basis of Thich Nhat Han's teaching)


spring dew . . .

each bare step a kiss

onto the wet mud

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jul 17, 2023
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I love your Ls 2 & 3.

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Jul 15, 2023

I am a water person, deeply drawn to the sound of the waves, the stillness of a lake, brimming with life river or waterfall. So your haiku resonates with me, Marilyn. Your words beautifully expresses my own feelings.

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Jul 16, 2023
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Disha,

Thank you for your kind words! I too am a water person 🌊

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Jul 15, 2023

#2. 16.07.2023


the tiny splinter

he p—l–u-cks from my toe

a salty sting

(Feedback welcome)

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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
Jul 15, 2023

#2, 15.07.23


turmeric paste —

a family gossip coats

mom's heels


(Feedback welcome)

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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
Jul 14, 2023

#1, 14.07.23


Revised, thanks to Muskaan:


watching grandma stand on her toes …hibiscus blooms


Original:


hibiscus bloom

grandma attempts to stand

on her toes


(Feedback welcome)

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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
Jul 15, 2023
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I like this revision, Muskaan, as this includes involvement of the person watching the scene, establishing an intimacy between the poet and his/her grandma. Thanks for this feedback. Revising it.

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