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writeALONG!11th April

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Ajaya Mahala


The OUCH! moment

An "aha moment" is a much-used term in haiku parlance. There is nothing like an ouch moment in the haiku Jargon. Is the latter simply an antithesis?


bone density ...

a branch crumbles after the forest fire

-- Kala Ramesh


Kala's juxtaposition of outer world ( crumbling burnt branches) with the inner world ( the fear of breaking brittle bones in osteoporosis) elicits an "ouch". Her haiku illustrates the fact that the haiku moment need not be pleasant and soothing to the senses always. There may be moments which are piquant, harsh, fearful , hateful resulting from morphing and blending our senses in a variety of ways.


his last minutes ...

a line of ants ready for the forage

-- Suchitra Rath


We have our own encounters with ouch moments. Can we enlist them ?

It will be nice if some instance manifests itself through a low-calorie micropoem.


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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Apr 13, 2023

Beautiful prompt, Ajaya. And many thanks for quoting my poem.

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Thank you, Kala ..banking upon the legacy of INhaiku days

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 12, 2023

#2

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myopia

another big bang

in the planetarium

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feedback please

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 14, 2023
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Actually i forgot my spectacles and it just caught me haywire during the show. Thank you.

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Apr 11, 2023

#1


ice rink the old wound that starts to bleed


Feedback appreciated:)

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Apr 17, 2023
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thanks:)

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 11, 2023

#1

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all eyes

on grandpa's varicose

. . . autumn venation

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feedback please

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 17, 2023
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okay, thanks.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 11, 2023

Beautiful share Ajaya!

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