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triveni spotlight: 3rd October 2023

Updated: Oct 3, 2023

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Kala Ramesh and Vidya Shankar GUEST EDITOR: Keiko Izawa 3rd October 2023


fukurami ni naifu no katachi bankakō


shape of a knife

in the bulging pocket

late summer sun


Sō Suzuno

from 365 Nichi Kigo Techō - 365-Day Kigo Diary.


During this month, I’d like to introduce contemporary Japanese haiku, including kigo, which are referred to as “yūki haiku(有季俳句)”. In yūki haiku, toriawase (matching kigo and the remaining phrases) is the key point, not to mention its creativity and originality. In my view, Japanese haiku are generally simple compared to English (language) haiku, but the subtle sensibility is embedded within as the synergies with the power of kigo. I hope you enjoy karumi (lightness) blended with seasonality in these haiku.

Keiko Izawa

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Thank you for being our next guest editor Keiko Izawa You are bringing something fresh and this is going to be a treat for all our members. _()_

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Oct 04, 2023

Loved 'the shape of a knife' allowing the readers to measure the size and shape and then think about the utility of that knife. Yes, L3 clearly states the season and yet, somewhere a thought about the exact aim of the person pushing that knife in that already 'bulging pocket'? Was the 'bulging' with some motive? an alarm of insecurity? There are tendencies for a person to fill his pockets with whatever he gets and immediately push the knife inside. And yes, line 1 states 'shape of a knife'. l 3 states 'late summer sun' not an early bird.

Just my thoughts. Thanks Keiko!!

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Oct 03, 2023

shape of a knife

in the bulging pocket

late summer sun


I imagine the pocket bulging with a harvest of fruit or vegetables, perhaps "borrowed" from a neighbor's garden. As an adolescent, I carried a pocket knife called a Swiss Army knife along with a rabbit's foot (!) in my jean pockets. I hadn't thought about this in years, but this haiku instantly took me down memory lane. Thank you, Keiko!

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Oct 04, 2023
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❤️

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Oct 03, 2023

Striking haiku. I loved reading Lev's comment. Thank you, Keiko.

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Keiko Izawa
Keiko Izawa
Oct 03, 2023
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You’re welcome, Kala. Thank you for your invitation!

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An unique haiku. Only poets from Japan can make such juxtaposition possible. It makes me pause in my tracks and think. Thank you, Keiko!

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Sumitra  Kumar
Sumitra Kumar
Oct 04, 2023
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Yes! Very unique.

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Oct 03, 2023

shape of a knife

in the bulging pocket

late summer sun


The juxtaposition is based on comparison. Late summer is the time when crops are bulging, and so the fragment reflects the phrase. The ku is focused on "bulging." Perhaps "the shape of a knife" is a euphemism. I am reminded of a line from Mae West, "Is that a banana in your pocket, or are you just happy to see me?"


The verse, however, is a haiku. It's more than a wry quip. The kigo sets the phrase in the context of time's natural cycle. The verse evokes light humour, as displays of nature often do. The idea of light humour chimes with Basho's concept of karumi, "lightness."

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Sumitra  Kumar
Sumitra Kumar
Oct 04, 2023
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Thanks, Lev, for the description. Perhaps knife is also referring to the ‘cutting’ heat. Some crops might need extra sun to thrive.


Thanks Keiko! Fortunate to read and experience such lovely work.

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