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triveni spotlight: 30 november

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh GUEST EDITOR: Paul Miller (paul m.)


to the one breaking it—

the fragrance

of the plum


Chiyo-ni

Woman Haiku Master, trans. Patricia Donegan (1998)



Note by the Guest Editor:

These poems have been pulled from my ever-growing document of favorite haiku.

Some I have admired for years, while others I have newly discovered. This is the

joy of poetry, as of life: its ever-changing course of discovery. I encourage all

readers of poetry to keep such a file. As far as has been possible, I have obtained

permission from the writers to share them.


– Paul Miller (paul m.)


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lynne jambor
lynne jambor
Nov 30, 2022

Imo, the first line is a gem! I admire the concept of breaking with the traditional plum fragrance; which of course leads one to think of breaking many other traditional concepts. Great choice.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Nov 29, 2022

Nice!!

Liked 'to the one breaking it' with an em dash. Syllable count has become a choice of the poets. And i feel the sum total of syllables can be kept as a margin..... distribution can be anyway.

Sometimes, the voice of the poet demands so. The essence of the poem lies in line one on which the other two lines ride on. Em dash is the deciding factor. It emphasis the action, result can be anything.


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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
Nov 29, 2022

Nice, unusual, simple, very tactile. Long L 1 with 6 syllables…

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