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triveni spotlight : 29 june

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh guest editor: Geethanjali Rajan

theme: listening



wind-shaped gorse

the rise and fall

of a lammergeier’s call

Sonam Chhoki, Bhutan

(Frogpond 38.3 Autumn 2015)



Note by the editor: The theme for June 2022 is ‘listening’. I hope you enjoy the music, sounds, and silences of nature in these showcased poems of close observation.

This month has come to an end and triveni spotlight thanks Geethanjali for giving us a month of myriad sounds to rejoice and revel. _k


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Debbie Strange
Debbie Strange
30 de jun. de 2022

Such a stunning image from a master poet! One thing that strikes me about this poem is the posssible double meaning of "wind-shaped". The gorse itself may have taken on a particular shape due to the wind's unrelenting influence, but this might also refer to the way a hillside of gorse undulates in the wind much like ocean waves. Feathers are also "wind-shaped" when a bird is in flight, and this subtle reinforcement of the image is striking and beautiful. Thank you for sharing Sonam's gifts, and for your lovely selections throughout the month of June. I hope to be able to comment further when my reading assistant is available.

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Respondendo a

Thank you, Debbie, for deepening my understanding of the haiku. Yes, the mountains and valleys of Bhutan have many delights that are 'wind-shaped'.

Thank you for being a part of this month, Debbie.


Warmly,

Geethanjali


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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
30 de jun. de 2022

Thanks to everyone for your insights on this lyrically pleasant, beautifully constructed haiku. Since I am unfamiliar with both the gorse plant and this impressive-looking bird, I've refrained from critique for this round. I did a little online research to get an overall picture, but I generally only write about subjects I have direct experience with.

Thank you, Geethanjali, for your thoughtful and obviously well-researched selection. It's been a rich month of haiku for me. I've enjoyed reading and commenting on these poems in the company of all you who joined this group conversation!

-----Billie

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
30 de jun. de 2022
Respondendo a

And we loved having you here, Billie.

Waiting for August - when you would be posting your selections. Thanks a million for being with us, here and in all our other forums too.

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Sonam Chhoki brings together the visual, the auditory, myth and nature - all in this beautiful poem of links and shifts. The gorse is a beautiful image and one that is shaped by the wind is even more so. The way the 'wind' links to a lammergeier and the 'rise and fall' drew me to its wings (though it's not mentioned in the poem.) And just when that image settled in, the rise and fall was a surprise - it was the call of the bird! That the gorse itself brings in many images of the wings of birds and flying (to me) makes this haiku one which is rich in the sensory and suggestion. Thank you, Sonam, for this…


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
29 de jun. de 2022
Respondendo a

Thank you for explaining!!

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
29 de jun. de 2022

I am still confused with L1

'why wind-shaped gorse'?

I understood to some extent but if Sonam could explain the whole process, won't it be delightful! And I loved the lammergeier's call.

Thank you Geetanjali!

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Respondendo a

I agree, kala. It also enriches the image I feel.

Also, I got the association to the saying that its not the mightiest trees that withstand a storm but the ones that bend with the wind. I suppose we too are shaped by so many things. Of course, all this is just a reader's wandering with the image- perhaps, nothing else. :)


Geethanjali

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
28 de jun. de 2022

Lovely poem. I love the pivot line and the resonance throughout the poem is satisfying.


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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
30 de jun. de 2022
Respondendo a

Please continue to visit and share your thoughts on haiku posted here, Geethanjali. _()_ I wish you could request Sonam to join.

This is a beautiful site for serious haikai.

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