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triveni spotlight: 23rd september 2023

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Kala Ramesh and Vidya Shankar GUEST EDITOR: Shreya Narang & Samir Satam 23rd September 2023




red plaid shawl -

I become the sound

of autumn rain

Jenny Ward Angyal Presence 69


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Thank you for being our next guest editors Shreya and Samir We are waiting to see the month unfold. _()_

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24 sept 2023

Re: "I become the sound / of autumn rain." This is telling, not showing, and it's not convincing. The moment I read it, the thought immediately occurred to me, "No, you don't." The sound of autumn rain is incapable of saying anything about itself. I am reminded of the title of a collection of Zen essays, "A Flower Does Not Talk."


Basho writes:


Gazing at the flowers

Of the morning glory,

I eat my breakfast. (Blyth, trans.)


The reader might well repond, "The poet is one with the morning glories." But would the reader agree if the poet said the same thing about himself?


Eating my breakfast

I am one with the flowers

Of the morning glory.


I cannot imagine…

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Eavonka Ettinger
Eavonka Ettinger
28 sept 2023
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My apologies. I won't do it again.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
24 sept 2023

Jenny is one of my favourite poets and this poem is so well handled. Congrats Shreya and Samir for selecting this ku. _()_


I love Billie's comment.

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Vidya Shankar
Vidya Shankar
23 sept 2023

The synesthesia effect here is so calming. Thank you for sharing this ku, @shreyanarang1711 and @samir satam .

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
23 sept 2023

Learning a lot from such poems that instils a better understanding. Thank you!

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
23 sept 2023

A lovely, lovely poem. . . just what I'd expect of Jenny Angyal, whose work I deeply admire. The red plaid shawl is strikingly jux'd against the linear pattern of rain; the synesthesia really makes this piece memorable. Thanks for sharing this one, Shreya and Samir!


---Billie


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
23 sept 2023
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Yes!!

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