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triveni spotlight : 21 july

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh guest editor: Scott Mason

Theme: hand play



falling leaves

we exchange

the gesture to call


Aparna Pathak

The Heron’s Nest

Vol. XX, No. 4 (December 2018)


All these poems were originally published in The Heron's Nest. I chose to confine my search there not just for the quality but also for the convenience of its online archive. Guest Editor: Scott Mason



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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
2022년 7월 21일

falling leaves

we exchange

the gesture to call

---Aparna Pathak


What interests me most about this elegantly simple poem is it's juxtaposition:

falling leaves (our clocks are ticking)

call (let's share the moment before it's gone)


I am reminded of Issa's great haiku

the world of dew

is the world of dew,

and yet . . . and yet


The simple hand gesture adds visual texture to Pathak's poem. Thanks for posting this Scott.


Carpe diem, y'all!

---Billie

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2022년 7월 22일
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Yes!

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Aparna Pathak
Aparna Pathak
2022년 7월 21일

Wow !! What a pleasant surprise !!


Thank you so much Scott !!


Thank you Kala and Teji !!


This haiku was inspired from an observation of two females (close friends perhaps), who were exchanging a "call me" gesture from their respective balconies. Since the day was bit windy, both the ladies were unable to talk directly and hence, decided to have chit chat on phone.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2022년 7월 22일
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Thinking from fragment and phrase point of view.

5:7:5

5 is fragment

12 is phrase.

Can be the other way too.

As you pointed out the 'semi-circle'


Just a thought only.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
2022년 7월 21일

Same here! I hope Aparna gets here :)))

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2022년 7월 21일

Beautiful!!

' we exchange the gesture to call'

I understood this in a very small way. If Aparna can explain in detail about these lines, it would be helpful. Thanks!

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