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triveni spotlight : 15 august

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh guest editor: Billie Dee

Theme: Close Observation


night walk

one toe on the moon

ripples the pond


Kath Abela Wilson

Pasadena, California, USA


Creatrix Online Haiku Journal #37, 2017.



I am pleased to submit the following selected poems from my personal "favorite haiku" list, one I've developed over the last 30 years or so. All have been approved by the authors; all include publication credits (except one from Patricia Machmiller which is unpublished); all are from the U.S. Pacific coastal rim (my region). I have chosen "close observation" as my theme, a guiding principle in my own writing, and a core element IMO for developing a Haiku Mind.

Peace,

Billie Dee


p.s. Under-lined book titles have embedded links where a reader can go to purchase the book.


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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
Aug 17, 2022

night walk

one toe on the moon

ripples the pond


Kath Abela Wilson

kigo=moon, autumn


It's hard to find a haikai or waka journal these days that doesn't include something by Kath Abela Wilson. She's one of the most energetic and proliferation poets I know, and an earnest promoter of art and artists in general.

This poem is full of atmospheric night-sparkle. Notice her direct monosyllabic cadence in L1-2 up to the two syllable "ripples" action word. Such economy of language, and yet, consider all the layers of playful imagination present in this ku.

I love how she avoids the expected cliche of a rippled moon, and how we immediately see that image without being told what to look for.


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 17, 2022
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Yes!!

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Kanji Dev
Kanji Dev
Aug 16, 2022

This is delightful, Billie! Love the image of one toe on the moon _()_

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 15, 2022

Billie,


love Kath Abela's poem! Playful yet layered! Makes me smile ❤️

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 15, 2022

Beautifully crafted.

As small kids try to dip our feet in the pond and sway it, i can imagine this poem taking me so close to those memories.


Yes, night walk as one toe on the reflection of the moon in the pond surely brings ripples.


It's not that easy to craft the imagination/ the happening into this layer.


Thank you for posting this poem under Close Observation!!!

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Aug 14, 2022

lockdown the swings sway without children Adult honourable mention Japan Fair 2021 Selected by Michael Dylan Welch

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
Aug 15, 2022
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Hi Mona, would you care to comment on Wilson's poem?

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