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A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY!
hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh
guest editor: Billie Dee
Theme: Close Observation
night walk
one toe on the moon
ripples the pond
Kath Abela Wilson
Pasadena, California, USA
Creatrix Online Haiku Journal #37, 2017.
I am pleased to submit the following selected poems from my personal "favorite haiku" list, one I've developed over the last 30 years or so. All have been approved by the authors; all include publication credits (except one from Patricia Machmiller which is unpublished); all are from the U.S. Pacific coastal rim (my region). I have chosen "close observation" as my theme, a guiding principle in my own writing, and a core element IMO for developing a Haiku Mind.
Peace,
Billie Dee
p.s. Under-lined book titles have embedded links where a reader can go to purchase the book.
night walk
one toe on the moon
ripples the pond
Kath Abela Wilson
kigo=moon, autumn
It's hard to find a haikai or waka journal these days that doesn't include something by Kath Abela Wilson. She's one of the most energetic and proliferation poets I know, and an earnest promoter of art and artists in general.
This poem is full of atmospheric night-sparkle. Notice her direct monosyllabic cadence in L1-2 up to the two syllable "ripples" action word. Such economy of language, and yet, consider all the layers of playful imagination present in this ku.
I love how she avoids the expected cliche of a rippled moon, and how we immediately see that image without being told what to look for.
This is delightful, Billie! Love the image of one toe on the moon _()_
Billie,
love Kath Abela's poem! Playful yet layered! Makes me smile ❤️
Beautifully crafted.
As small kids try to dip our feet in the pond and sway it, i can imagine this poem taking me so close to those memories.
Yes, night walk as one toe on the reflection of the moon in the pond surely brings ripples.
It's not that easy to craft the imagination/ the happening into this layer.
Thank you for posting this poem under Close Observation!!!
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