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triveni spotlight : 07 august

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh guest editor: Billie Dee

Theme: Close Observation



my white lie— long grass longer by a damselfly-length

Carolyn Hall

San Francisco, California, USA

Hall, Carolyn. Water Lines. United Kingdom: Snapshot Press, 2006.


I am pleased to submit the following selected poems from my personal "favorite haiku" list, one I've developed over the last 30 years or so. All have been approved by the authors; all include publication credits (except one from Patricia Machmiller which is unpublished); all are from the U.S. Pacific coastal rim (my region). I have chosen "close observation" as my theme, a guiding principle in my own writing, and a core element IMO for developing a Haiku Mind.

Peace,

Billie Dee


p.s. Under-lined book titles have embedded links where a reader can go to purchase the book.


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Thank you, Billie, for selecting my poem to feature in this column. And thank you all for your insightful comments. Much appreciated!!!

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Aug 09, 2022
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Carolyn,

We need a poem from you on HAIKUsutradhar! https://www.trivenihaikai.in/post/haikusutradhar-5th-august-2022

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Daya Bhat
Daya Bhat
Aug 08, 2022

Thank you so much for sharing this masterpiece! I am extremely conscious of sharing my interpretation. Kindly excuse me for meddling with it.

Going purely by symbolism- Long grass implies delaying something because we want people to forget about it. And among the many things damselfly, hope I have got this right, is known for being exceptionally agile and fast. Which means it cannot be caught easily.

Putting these together I can see a hope progressing in the haiku of remaining uncaught with regard to the white lie.

Many thanks Billie Dee _()_

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Daya Bhat
Daya Bhat
Aug 11, 2022
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Thank you so much dear Kala _()_

It's reassuring!

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 08, 2022

Billie,


Thank you for Carolyn's ku and for your analysis. I value both. I had seen and photographed a damsel fly just before reading your selection and I pay closer attention to these synchronicities. I struggle with some kigo I have not experienced but this one allowed me to sink deeper into understanding. The damselfly has a long and thin straight body, lace wings that come together in rest and a brightly colored body although easily overlooked like a small jewel. Once it catches your eye, it dazzles! Perhaps this is how a white lie operates on an emotional level. Telling one can be easily overlooked, at least in the beginning. Yet it registers straight to the heart, an…

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 08, 2022
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Billie,

thank you! Carolyn's haiku are well-worth the mulling over ( love that expression). And, I wish to add I love your analysis. I do not have a poetry background and so wish to learn more about the art form. I came to haiku through the backdoor of Sufism, when I lost my spiritual mentor of 17 years. Before leaving she suggested poetry, and haiku answered my longing.

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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
Aug 08, 2022

This poem gnaws into you. The music, beat, and inherent meaning of the words.

White lie .. covered .. by long grass .. even longer grass ..

Damselflies reminded me of dragonflies. i googled them and learned they’re equal winged (dragonfly is unequal-winged) rather beautiful creatures, beneficial predators. Their symbolism is positive, one of purity and protection.

The juxtaposition of the white lie .. with damselfly is magnificent.

Thank you, Billie Dee, for posting this.

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
Aug 08, 2022
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Thank you Rupa. I think constructive critique of a masterful poem such as this is the best way to improve my own writing. It really stirs up the "creative juices."

Glad you've dropped in and shared your thoughtful insights!


---Billie

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Ruchita Madhok
Ruchita Madhok
Aug 08, 2022

Thank you for sharing this, Bille. It is a wonderful work indeed. Gentle, delicate, brimming with "close observation" as you mention and so full of atmosphere. A moment in time capturing the eternal truth of a lie!

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