A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, K.Ramesh
guest editor: Keith Evetts
Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.
Poets are requested to post poems (haiku/senryu) that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.
Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.
If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.
Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.
The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.
Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!
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This month we're going to draw on classic haiku and some old texts.
Two images, separated and juxtaposed, aren’t the only form of haiku. There are many impeccable examples containing one image (ichibutsujitate), but this week I'd like to focus on those with multiple image elements.
the westward sun
the eastward moon
rape blossom...
—Buson
Three elements: the sun, the moon, and the blossom, in three distinct parts. The arrangement paints a beautiful picture. The common link is gold. It has balance between the sun and the moon, with their particular associations, around the focal point of the blossom. An example of toriawase, the harmonious “taking and combining of things.”
Bashō has a few with multiple elements. So does Issa. This week, find good examples of classic or contemporary haiku or senryu with more than two image elements, where the elements are elegantly arranged and related, and post them here. Then try to write one. Paint a picture:
a shaft of sunlight
on the vase of roses
music room
— Tim Cremin
#1, 11/12
grandchild on my hip
on my left, the hand points up
on the right to the moon
Lakshmi Iyer, India
Feedback welcome
#1 12-8-24
gloaming
where sun and moon meet
deep exhale of day
Jennifer Gurney, US
December 8, 2024
Laila Brahmbhatt (Brooklyn, New York)
Post #2
The spring rain
Must have penetrated
Through the leaves
To feed the crystal spring
(By Basho- Translation: Nobuyuki Yuasa)
Rain combs the crumpled sky.
watches thirsty moon
sound of jealousy
(Feedback welcome )
Post #1
7.12.24
clear blue sky
a swoop of swallows
circles the earth
Mona Bedi
India
Feedback appreciated:)
Beautiful prompt, Keith Thanks a ton.