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THE HAIBUN GALLERY: 22nd September — a Thursday feature

Hosts: Firdaus Parvez and Kala Ramesh

22nd September 2022

We have Kat Lehman with us, once again!

Squirrel A Way I search for hidden deer and a place to sit next to audible water. Try to find my mind again. Maybe a new bird. I sort the major from the minor, the shakers from the shaken. Dodge the falling acorns. But what really rules my moment is this disintegrating leaf. The autumn maple feeds its future vernal self with a little left over to share with the other trees. It surrenders everything for a hope in the unknown. Without it, the rest falls apart. worm cycle the crowdsourcing of pink petals

Kat Lehmann

Modern Haiku 53:1 (2022)



I read this beautiful haibun several times. Like classical music - the more I listened the more it yielded. From you, we want a haibun that's loaded with *haikai prose* - which is tight prose - following the principle of less is more and cap it with an effective haiku - not just any old haiku ... :))


As always, a good haibun will find its way into the next issue of our fabulous journal. Firdaus and I are eagerly looking forward to reading your haibun.


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1. Only two haibun per poet per prompt.

2. Share your best-polished pieces.

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4. When poets give suggestions and if you agree to them - post your final edited version on top of your original version.

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We are delighted to open the comment thread for you to share your unpublished haibun (within 300 words) to be considered for inclusion in the haikuKATHA monthly journal.



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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022年9月27日

Revised: Thank you Kala for your astute suggestions!!!


Tuned In, Tuned Out


For my birthday, my parents buy me a Realistic portable radio from Radio Shack. It’s not very good. Mostly I just hear static, tinny rock or the crackle of our neighbour’s ham radio.


My dad, being a sound technician and a lover of loud music, decides to build me an external speaker. This is one of those times where I have to remind myself to be careful what I wish for. Dad has a tendency towards creativity. Like the time he built a wooden couch for our cabin and painted it bright orange. And then built a sailboat in our basement and painted it orange too.


It takes…


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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022年9月29日
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Thanks Ron, I wondered about that. Thank you for pointing it out. I will edit.

Much appreciated.

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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
2022年9月27日

Revised 1 (with input from Kala)


The Yellow Strut


I recognise the pair because one of them has a slight problem in the neck, is thinner, a bit straggly and scratches often.

Extremely silent at 5 am, I watch them, seated from my verandah, just six feet across and send the pair, especially the unwell one, beams of healing energy.

moonset—

the traffic starting

to jangle my nerves


feedback - yes

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The Yellow Strut


I recognise the pair because one of them has a slight problem in the neck, is thinner, a bit straggly and scratches often.

Extremely silent at 5 am, I watch them, seated from my verandah, just six feet across and send the pair, especially…


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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
2022年9月28日
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Yes, perhaps.Will edit it out.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
2022年9月26日

Wonderstruck I go to the balcony to drink the night — through the darkness I see leaves still breathing still moving a gentle breeze caresses my cheeks with the faraway river falling head over heels on its course even as stars keep beat miracles gather life’s momentum I lean on the railings and softly hum a raaga to the pulsing lightness of dawn billowing clouds the horizon again and again reinvents itself


feedback welcome.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
2022年9月28日
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It's called the 'stream of consciousness'. Google and see, you'll get a lot of information about this style.

:)))

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2022年9月26日

Revised: thanks to Ron (26-9-2022)

Editing them as Kala suggested. Changing the title too. ( I thought of Mahalaya as it is the beginning of Navaratri, it suggests Amavasya day and the buzzing of activities are on a hike)27-9-2022


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Mahalaya Twilight settles on the banks of the Ganges. Crows fly through the dim light down west. I always wonder where they went for not all of them own their homes. The dense mango tree touches the balcony of our hotel room. My eyes takes time to adjust to this darkness. Slowly, I see a movement . Two crows are sitting apart. One of the crows looks at me. I whisper. 'hey you! I found you'. She moves a little.…


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2022年9月26日
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Ok!

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mona bedi
mona bedi
2022年9月25日

Renewal


“Me time” is what I call it. A small window in a twenty four hour day when I have no connect with the outer world. The phone is on airplane mode and the mind is totally into the moment. It's then I hear my heart beating and the clock ticking. A tepid breeze from the window brushes my face. The sound of the street hawker fills my ears. The loud silence of the house envelops me till I feel its time to go back to the cacaphony of daily life.


lonely night

I make friends

with a shadow puppet


Feedback appreciated:)

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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022年9月26日
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Sorry, one last edit suggestion - your second line of prose...I would adjust "connect" to "connection" (as in, "when I have no connection with the outer world).

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