hosts: Firdaus Parvez, Kala Ramesh, Priti Aisola & Suraja Menon Roychowdhury
Introducing a new perspective to our Wednesday Feature!
featured book: The Ink Dark Moon: Love Poems by Ono no Komachi and Izumi Shikibu, Women of the Ancient Court of Japan. Translated by Jane Hirshfield with Mariko Aratani November 22, 2023
Tokiwa Mountain’s pine trees
are always green—
I wonder,
do they recognize autumn
in the sound of the blowing wind?
– Ono no Komachi
Even though
these pine trees
keep their original color,
everything green
is different in spring.
– Izumi Shikibu
“It is interesting to compare this poem with the one by Komachi...to see how the same idea (that evergreens do not change color with the seasons) can be used as the basis of poems widely different in meaning.”
– Jane Hirshfield
—The Ink Dark Moon - Love poems by Ono no Komachi and Izumi Shikibu.
Women of ancient Court of Japan.
Translated by Jane Hirshfield with Mariko Aratani
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Note: This book has the English translation of poems by two great Japanese women tanka poets. It has Japanese versions as well, and if you want to read how they have translated the verses I recommend that you buy the book. I can only post the tanka and probably a short excerpt. There’s a good portion of the book dedicated to the translation method and some interesting facts.
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Important: Since we're swamped with submissions, and our editors are only human, mistakes can happen. Please, please, remember to put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions. It really helps our editors; they won't have to type it in, saving them from potential typos. Thanks a ton!
Please also, in case of tanka-art, tell us if it's your own picture or someone else's. We will be unable to accept it otherwise.
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The challenge for this week:
How beautiful are these two tanka; both with the thought of evergreen trees but talking of different seasons thus changing the perspective. This week write your poem/s using a colour or colours. See where that takes you. You can write outside this challenge too. Have fun!
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And remember – tanka, because of those two extra lines, lends itself most beautifully when revealing a story. And tanka prose is storytelling.
Give these ideas some thought and share your tanka and tanka-prose with us here. Keep your senses open, observe things that happen around you and write. You can post tanka and tanka-prose outside these themes too.
An essay on how to write tanka: Tanka Flights here
PLEASE NOTE
1. Post only one poem at a time, only one per day.
2. Only 2 tanka and two tanka-prose per poet per prompt.
Tanka art of course if you want to.
3. Share your best-polished pieces.
4. Please do not post something in a hurry or something you have just written. Let it simmer for a while.
5. Post your final edited version on top of your original verse.
6. Don't forget to give feedback on others' poems.
We are delighted to open the comment thread for you to share your unpublished tanka and tanka-prose (within 250 words) to be considered for inclusion in the haikuKATHA monthly magazine.
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30.11.2023
Revised,,Thank you so much Lakshmi,Suraja,and Amrutha
(Taking Amrutha's version)
gently falling
autumn leaves
i recall
grandma's kumkum
forever showing the light
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Original
autumn leaves gently fall
inviting mindful pause
fall and rise again
journey still beautiful
nature's eternal dance
Pradnya Joshi
Uk.
Feedback welcome.
Edited:
daylight
changing colours
the reflected sun
doubles up towards me ...
a quiet wave at my feet
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daylight zone
changing colours
the reflected sun
doubles up towards me ...
a quiet wave at my feet
Kala Ramesh India
Feedback appreciated.
the old compass
points north, and then
swings south
I spend her birthday
laughing and sobbing
Jpy McCall UK
Feedback, please? Joy lost her daughter many decades ago.
#4
28/11/2023
Super natural talent
The world demonstrates over and again, cheating is good — if one can get away with it.
circling
their wand
the wizard
no measure of depths
in fooling the audience
Well, if you ask people, given a boon what they would want? I believe it would probably be - to live forever, or to go back in time, or to have the ability to read minds.
operating
the yo-yo
a mystique
deep down in their heart
few drops of doubt
Amrutha V. Prabhu
Bharat
Feedback most welcome :)
#2 feedback welcome
28th November 2023
tracking
the sudden flight of a magpie
now i know
why my mother is lonely
after her nest is empty
Amoolya Kamalnath
India