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open sky :: SAMVAAD | 8th October

hosts : Sanjuktaa Asopa & Kashiana Singh


fall twilight—

my brother going out

long

- Barry George


( Snapshots #8,2000)


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Oct 11, 2023

I thought about the juxtapose with line 1. 'fall twilight' and 'long' - maybe the shadows.

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Adelaide Shaw
Adelaide Shaw
Oct 10, 2023

Did not understand this at all until I read the poet's explanation. I'm not sure if even a football player would see the meaning clearly. Perhaps, the poet should have written long for the catch in L3


Adelaide

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I too am not familiar with the phrase 'going out long', but I think it's this unusual turn of phrase that lends another dimension to the poem and leaves one wondering.

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It's all about bonds.

Here is the much-awaited commentary by Barry George for you:


Here is the story behind it. My brother, Phil, and I are close enough in age that when we were growing up, we constantly played sports together - sometimes team sports and sometimes just the two of us. This haiku was inspired by memories of our throwing a football back and forth to each other in the backyard. We would take turns, one being the quarterback and the other being the receiver. In my imagination, it is a late Saturday afternoon in October or November. The dark is setting in, and before long we will be called inside to have dinner. With just enough light left…

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Oct 11, 2023
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Loved this.

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Intriguing, isn't it? I hadn't been able to get to the bottom of it for years and yet drawn magnetically every time.

I love your responses, keep them coming. Will post the poet's comments in a few days, maybe tomorrow or the day after.

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Nani Mariani
Nani Mariani
Oct 08, 2023

Or, his younger brother will study in another city..🙏

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Close, close!

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