laughALONG! 25th July
- Muskaan Ahuja
- Jul 25, 2023
- 2 min read
Updated: Jul 28, 2023
A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer
guest editor: Marilyn Ashbaugh
Please note:
Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.
Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.
Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.
If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.
Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.
The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.
Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!
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all the things
that pass me by
. . . dandelions
-- H. Gene Murtha
Haiku poets generally are in agreement with Thoreau when he remarked,"You must live in the present, launch yourself on any wave, find your eternity in each moment."
--- Speculations by Robert Spiess
It is often said that to write good haiku one must read good haiku. Reading good haiku is
essential to my writing practice. The rhythm stimulates my intuition and before I know it I
am ready to write.
Select a poem or two from haikuKATHA or elsewhere that you feel resonates with the above
quote. It may be your haiku or someone else's. Write a word or phrase from the haiku.
Close your eyes, take a few deep breaths, and let your intuition wander. Write down your
"wanderings" and play until a haiku presents itself.
Please share your haiku with us.
bigwigs
a pair of bumblebees
in the foxglove
--- Marilyn Ashbaugh
It's a beautiful prompt.
But I had a doubt about this idea.
Can we take another poet's best thoughts/line and make it our own? _kala
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To which Marilyn replied: No we cannot. It was meant as a starting point, an inspiration, for one's own "wanderings", which create a completely new haiku. I am afraid I did not make this clear and it has been taken literally.
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Thank you, Marilyn.
Apologies that it took me a while to come back to this. I had a few sources to find. My sense is that quoting a part of a pre-existing haiku to create a new a different poem— even in such a short form as haiku — is OK within the Fair Use exceptions to US copyright law. The principle of Transformation and requires that the resulting new work be different, and I think most of the poems posted here meet that standard.
US copyright page on transformation:
https://www.copyright.gov/fair-use/#:~:text=Additionally%2C%20%E2%80%9Ctransformative%E2%80%9D%20uses%20are,original%20use%20of%20the%20work.
Some years ago in a found poetry workshop with Neal Whitman, I learned about a form called Cento, which is completely compiled of lines from earlier poems. I’ve tried it, an…
Marilyn,
Thank you for being the guest editor this month and giving us such interesting prompts to improve our craft.
#2
Silent Valley
the moon lights up a dead crow
on a stump
feedback welcome
Thank you @marilyn ashbaugh It was a memorable journey in thinkALONG and a learning too!
#1, 28.07.23
village home dusk —
one of the muddy kids
releases the bucket
(Feedback welcome)