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laughALONG! 25th July

Updated: Jul 28, 2023

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Marilyn Ashbaugh



Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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all the things

that pass me by

. . . dandelions


-- H. Gene Murtha


Haiku poets generally are in agreement with Thoreau when he remarked,"You must live in the present, launch yourself on any wave, find your eternity in each moment."


--- Speculations by Robert Spiess


It is often said that to write good haiku one must read good haiku. Reading good haiku is

essential to my writing practice. The rhythm stimulates my intuition and before I know it I

am ready to write.


Select a poem or two from haikuKATHA or elsewhere that you feel resonates with the above

quote. It may be your haiku or someone else's. Write a word or phrase from the haiku.

Close your eyes, take a few deep breaths, and let your intuition wander. Write down your

"wanderings" and play until a haiku presents itself.


Please share your haiku with us.



bigwigs

a pair of bumblebees

in the foxglove


--- Marilyn Ashbaugh


It's a beautiful prompt.

But I had a doubt about this idea.

Can we take another poet's best thoughts/line and make it our own? _kala

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To which Marilyn replied: No we cannot. It was meant as a starting point, an inspiration, for one's own "wanderings", which create a completely new haiku. I am afraid I did not make this clear and it has been taken literally.


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Thank you, Marilyn.

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Apologies that it took me a while to come back to this. I had a few sources to find. My sense is that quoting a part of a pre-existing haiku to create a new a different poem— even in such a short form as haiku — is OK within the Fair Use exceptions to US copyright law. The principle of Transformation and requires that the resulting new work be different, and I think most of the poems posted here meet that standard.

US copyright page on transformation:

https://www.copyright.gov/fair-use/#:~:text=Additionally%2C%20%E2%80%9Ctransformative%E2%80%9D%20uses%20are,original%20use%20of%20the%20work.


Some years ago in a found poetry workshop with Neal Whitman, I learned about a form called Cento, which is completely compiled of lines from earlier poems. I’ve tried it, an…


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Muskaan Ahuja
Muskaan Ahuja
2023年7月30日

Marilyn,


Thank you for being the guest editor this month and giving us such interesting prompts to improve our craft.

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
2023年7月30日
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Muskaan,

It was my pleasure! Thank you for the opportunity!

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2023年7月29日

#2


Silent Valley

the moon lights up a dead crow

on a stump


feedback welcome

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Muskaan Ahuja
Muskaan Ahuja
2023年7月31日
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moonlit valley… a dead crow

shining on the stump


Does it work?

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
2023年7月29日

Thank you @marilyn ashbaugh It was a memorable journey in thinkALONG and a learning too!


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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
2023年7月30日
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You are welcome, Lakshmi!

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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
2023年7月28日

#1, 28.07.23


village home dusk —

one of the muddy kids

releases the bucket


(Feedback welcome)


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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
2023年7月29日
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Thanks, Marilyn!

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