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HAIKUsutradhar : 5th September 2025


A FRIDAY FEATURE


Host: Gauri Dixit Mentor: Kanjini Devi

Prompter for September : Nitu Yumnam


OUR MISSION

1. To provide a new poetry workshop each Friday, along with a prompt.

2. To select haiku, senryu, and haiga each month for the journal, haikuKATHA. Each issue will select poems that were posted in this forum from the 3rd of the previous month to the 2nd of the current month.


FEEDBACK GUIDELINES ( Included as a guideline, please do not be constrained by these while proving feedback )


Let the feedback be specific and constructive. Don’t be vague. Here are some helpful lines you could use to give feedback.


What is working for me :

1. The seasonal reference is good.

2. The image is very clear.

3. I love the internal rhythm.

4. When read aloud, the poem flows well.

5. The 'cut' which is so important in haiku is effectively done here.

6. I like the format ...it's short,long, short. Nice

7. I love the indent you have given


Points that aren't working for me:

1. The image is abstract

2. The lines are long.

3. Some words are redundant and can be safely removed.

4. The lightness of haiku isn't here.

5. Abstract words take away the haiku's charm

6. There is no 'cut' (kire) in this haiku.

7. There are two kigo (seasonal words) in this ku.

8. This is reading more like free verse.

9. This ku is reading as three separate lines. There is no connect.

SUBMISSION GUIDELINES

1. Post a maximum of two verses per week, from Friday to Friday, numbered 1 & 2. Post only one haiku in a day, in 24 hours.

2. Only post unpublished verses --- nothing that has appeared in peer-reviewed or edited journals, anthologies, your webpage, social media, etc.

3. Only post original verses.

4. For each poem you post, comment on one other person’s poem.

5. Give feedback only to those poets who have requested it.

6. Do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem is to appear in each original post.

7. Post each revision, if you have any, above the original. The top version will be your submission to haikuKATHA. Do not delete the original post.

8. Do not submit found poetry or split sequences.

9. Do not post photos, except for haiga.


10. haikuKATHA will only consider haiga that showcase original artwork or photos. Post details re: the source of the visual image. If you team up with an artist or photographer, make sure that it’s their original work and that they are not restricted by other publications to share it. We won't be responsible for any copyright issues.


11. Put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions.


12. Notification about all selected poems for each issue will be posted on CELEBRATION -on 10th of each month.


Poems that do not follow the guidelines may be deleted.

Founder/Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Monthly Journal: Kala Ramesh

Associate Editors: Ashish Narain Firdaus Parvez Priti Aisola Sanjuktaa Asopa Shalini Pattabiraman Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar Vidya Shankar

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PROMPT:

5th September

Nitu Yumnam


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Week 1: Ground-Dwelling Arthropods


As haiku poets, we pay close attention to the world beneath our feet. This week, we focus on ground-dwelling arthropods—the small but fascinating creatures that live on or just beneath the earth: ants, beetles, spiders, millipedes, crickets, and more.


Often overlooked, these tiny neighbours offer rich poetic inspiration through their movements, hidden lives, and the textures of the places they inhabit—beneath leaves, inside the soil, under stones.


Let us slow down and observe closely. Notice their scurry, their stillness, the delicate traces they leave behind.


Here are some example haiku to spark your imagination:


little hands

expose the secret life

of a family of millipedes


–Penny Scarlett, New Zealand


night

the rising frequency

of cricket songs


–Harshvardhan Joshi, India


picking mushrooms . . .

a suspended spider's web

coats my mother's face


– Goran Gatalica, Croatia

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Looking forward to reading your haiku. Poems outside the prompt can also be posted.

Write on! Gauri

212 Comments


Kalyanee
Kalyanee
Sep 11

11.09.2025

#1

Revision. Thank you, Alan Summers Sir.


visiting mom

son's first sight

of a millipede's curl


Kalyanee Arandhara

Assam, India


Feedback most welcome


Original:

vising mom

son's first sight

of a millipede's curl


Kalyanee Arandhara

Assam, India


Feedback most welcome

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You had this word: vising 


vising means:

"Vising" is the present participle (an action in progress) of the verb vise, meaning to hold, press, or squeeze something firmly with or as if it were a vise.


visiting means:

visit, visitation. the act of going to see some person or place or thing for a short time.


What about adding 'the'?


e.g.


visiting mom

the son's first sight

of a millipede's curl


If you do not want the reader to know whose son it is, so it could be the visiting mother, or the person she is visiting has a son in the room, it works like that.


or


visiting mom

her son's first sight

of a millipede's curl


or


visiting…


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#1.... 11/9/25


astrologer’s chart

termites nibble

at Saturn’s line


Nalini Shetty

India


feedback welcome

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Excellent. Just a passing thought. "in Saturns' home"? I am thinking of the way horoscopes look. "line" normally refers to palmistry. Sharing a thought, not editing suggestion.

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hide and seek

with my broom

darting lizard


Kavita Ratna

India

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Feedback most welcome


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#1 11.9.25


water bucket

mosquito larvae dance

in trapped light


Neena Singh, India


Feedback most welcome.

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Nitu such an interesting prompt---unknowingly we write so many haiku/senryu on arthropods!

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Thanks Nitu. Glad yu liked "flute recital".

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