HAIKUsutradhar : 4th July 2025
- Gauri
- Jul 4
- 3 min read
Updated: Jul 21
A FRIDAY FEATURE
Host: Gauri Dixit Mentor: Kanjini Devi
Prompter for July: C. X. Turner
OUR MISSION
1. To provide a new poetry workshop each Friday, along with a prompt.
2. To select haiku, senryu, and haiga each month for the journal, haikuKATHA. Each issue will select poems that were posted in this forum from the 3rd of the previous month to the 2nd of the current month.
FEEDBACK GUIDELINES ( Included as a guideline, please do not be constrained by these while proving feedback )
Let the feedback be specific and constructive. Don’t be vague. Here are some helpful lines you could use to give feedback.
What is working for me :
1. The seasonal reference is good.
2. The image is very clear.
3. I love the internal rhythm.
4. When read aloud, the poem flows well.
5. The 'cut' which is so important in haiku is effectively done here.
6. I like the format ...it's short,long, short. Nice
7. I love the indent you have given
Points that aren't working for me:
1. The image is abstract
2. The lines are long.
3. Some words are redundant and can be safely removed.
4. The lightness of haiku isn't here.
5. Abstract words take away the haiku's charm
6. There is no 'cut' (kire) in this haiku.
7. There are two kigo (seasonal words) in this ku.
8. This is reading more like free verse.
9. This ku is reading as three separate lines. There is no connect.
SUBMISSION GUIDELINES
1. Post a maximum of two verses per week, from Friday to Friday, numbered 1 & 2. Post only one haiku in a day, in 24 hours.
2. Only post unpublished verses --- nothing that has appeared in peer-reviewed or edited journals, anthologies, your webpage, social media, etc.
3. Only post original verses.
4. For each poem you post, comment on one other person’s poem.
5. Give feedback only to those poets who have requested it.
6. Do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem is to appear in each original post.
7. Post each revision, if you have any, above the original. The top version will be your submission to haikuKATHA. Do not delete the original post.
8. Do not submit found poetry or split sequences.
9. Do not post photos, except for haiga.
10. haikuKATHA will only consider haiga that showcase original artwork or photos. Post details re: the source of the visual image. If you team up with an artist or photographer, make sure that it’s their original work and that they are not restricted by other publications to share it. We won't be responsible for any copyright issues.
11. Put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions.
12. Notification about all selected poems for each issue will be posted on CELEBRATION -on 10th of each month.
Poems that do not follow the guidelines may be deleted.
Founder/Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Monthly Journal: 
Kala Ramesh
Associate Editors: Ashish Narain Firdaus Parvez Priti Aisola Sanjuktaa Asopa Shalini Pattabiraman Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar Vidya Shankar
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PROMPT:
4th July
C. X. Turner
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Week 1 : The Weight of Fullness
There are moments when the world seems full to the brim. Fruit swells. Air thickens. Roads shimmer. Even time can feel heavy — ready to tip or blur.
This week, write of fullness — in body, in feeling, or in perception.
yours,luci
milky way
the thud of acorns
when they fall
— Paul Miller
beachcombing
countless empty homes
washed ashore
— Kala Ramesh
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Looking forward to reading your haiku. Poems outside the prompt can also be posted. 
Write on! Gauri



#1
airplane window
the chrome sunset
and I are one
Ranu Jain, Australia
Feedback welcome.
10/7/25
2. feedback welcome
billowing clouds her third trimester
Marilyn Ashbaugh, USA
#2, 10/7/25
Edited: (with thanks to @Kanjini Devi)
after the rains
squelchy footsteps
on my mopped floor
Original:
in the mud
squelchy footsteps
after the rains
Baisali Chatterjee Dutt, Kolkata
Feedback always welcome 🌸
10/07/2025
Moon-lit gathering
I breathe in laughs
of the family flock
- Iffah Peerzada, India
All suggestions welcome 😊
My intention is to capture that feeling after a wedding or birthday when half of the guests have left. I'd be tired and overfed with aching feet thanks to running around kids ( I'm the official nanny in the family during such events). I would find an calmer place and get a chair and just plop down and sigh. I'd look up at the sky and just breathe in and embrace how tired I am, all the while listening to the belly laughs of my relatives. It's this warm feeling of temporary rest and this soft and deep joy from the…
It is very nice Fatma.