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HAIKUsutradhar : 3rd February 2023

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

Lev Hart becomes the MENTOR for HAIKUsutradhar from 21 November 2022. Thank you.


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of February: Ravi Kiran



Textual prompt


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar stepped down earlier in the year for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies and contest winners that were published elsewhere will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


openHALL Welcome to the openHALL. The first one for this year!


We began with the first month of this year by re-visiting and replenishing our basics with our mentor Lev Hart. This was also the reason for us not having an openHALL in the month of January.


But we open the second month little differently. Our first friday and therefore the first week of February, begins with openHALL. So why not revise our learnings of January! Bring forth your verse.


Also, this weekend is special as TRIVENI Utsav 2023 is being celebrated at Pune, India. We hope this openHALL will give all our poets attending the Utsav to share their aha! moments from the festival.

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Devoshruti Mandal
Devoshruti Mandal
Feb 10, 2023

#1


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window view

sun rays

on autumn leaves

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Please give feedback.

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The fragment comments on the phrase, telling the reader that the "sun rays / on autumn leaves" are a "window view." In short, the phrase is "telling." Perhaps the fragment could show the reader an image that somehow complemented the phrase, or stood in contrast to it, instead of commenting on it.

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Vibha Malhotra
Vibha Malhotra
Feb 10, 2023

Post #1 || 10.02.2023


morning star...

only the crow

sings


(feedback welcome)

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Vibha Malhotra
Vibha Malhotra
Feb 10, 2023
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heh he. okay Lev. Thank you for informing me.

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Feb 09, 2023

Post#2


reading ‘Emma’

i stop at the page

earmarked by you


Feedback appreciated:)

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samir satam
samir satam
Feb 09, 2023

islands

sewn together by waves ...

poets


samir satam


(critique is welcome)

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holding his daughter’s hand

beneath the rubble

winter stars

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Thank you Lev. Sometimes they just happen that way.

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