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HAIKUsutradhar : 30th September 2022

Updated: Oct 2, 2022

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of October: Kashiana Singh



Picture prompt


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA. At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Earlier in the year Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar also stepped down for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in a day ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. _()_

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Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


Daedalus warns Icarus first of complacency and then of hubris, instructing him to fly neither too low nor too high, lest the sea's dampness clog his wings or the sun's heat melt them. Icarus ignores Daedalus’ instructions not to fly too close to the sun, causing the wax in his wings to melt. He tumbles out of the sky, falls into the sea, and drowns. The myth gave rise to the idiom "don't fly too close to the sun".

Your Haiku should seek and be inspired by the below painting on Icarus -


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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
2022. okt. 07.

#2. 07.10.2022

Revised version (thank you, @Reid Hepworth)


layers of sea...

conscious connected breaths

of a dolphin


Original version:


layers of sea...

conscious connected

breaths of a dolphin


Unlike humans, dolphins can breath when they consciously decide to breath. Thus even while sleeping, half of the dolphins brain is awake to continue breathing. The same way, if Icarus would have consciously followed Daedalus' instructions, he would have lived.


(feedback welcome)

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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022. okt. 08.
Válasz címzettje:

Yes, this is better!

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mona bedi
mona bedi
2022. okt. 07.

Post #3 moth to a flame— I too get singed by your love Feedback appreciated:)

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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022. okt. 07.
Válasz címzettje:

Very nice, Mona! Something that a lot of us can relate to!!!

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Kavita Ratna
Kavita Ratna
2022. okt. 07.

October 7

#3

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fading colour

of the prayer flags

frayed sun

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Feedback welcome

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Kavita Ratna
Kavita Ratna
2022. okt. 08.
Válasz címzettje:

Thank you very much dear Reid. Means a lot to me.

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Daipayan  Nair
Daipayan Nair
2022. okt. 06.

haiku #3, 06.10.22


autumn evening –

a crow perches

on the dried wash


Feedback welcome

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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022. okt. 07.
Válasz címzettje:

Just hoping it doesn’t leave any deposits! 🙃

Lovely observation!

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Barrie Levine
Barrie Levine
2022. okt. 06.

No. 2 - Oct 6, 2022


ghost of Icarus

spread on the sea

morning mist


or


morning mist

spread on the sea

ghost of Icarus


*feedback welcome


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Reid Hepworth
Reid Hepworth
2022. okt. 07.
Válasz címzettje:

Love the first one, Barrie!

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