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HAIKUsutradhar : 26th August 2022

Updated: Aug 27, 2022

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of August: Yesha Shah



Open Prompt . Open Hall


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Akila G. Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Madhuri Pillai

Priti Aisola

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA. At the moment we are not looking at found poetry. ..................................................................................................... For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ........................................................................................................ The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to the sudden increase in the activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. Just ONE poem per day/ in 24 hours.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. _()_

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


He Ho. He Ho.

Yes! here we are with the OPEN HALL (open prompt) of HAIKUsutradhar for the month of August. An opportunity for all to let the wings of their creativity spread wide and fly in the sky of twinkling words. Write whatever comes to your mind, whatever your heart feels, whatever your eyes see, whatever sounds your ears are dancing to, spell your voice, and tell us what reflects your soul the most. We are waiting for your amazing poetry, holding our breath.


Give us your best shot.

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Milan Rajkumar
Milan Rajkumar
02 בספט׳ 2022

Fri,2nd Sept.


Great idea, Lev! ( Edited as suggested)


even my shadow is green . . . deep forest


Feedbacks welcome for the edited version.


#1


deep forest ...

everything is green

even my shadow


Feedbacks welcome ( forgotten to write)

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Lev Hart
Lev Hart
03 בספט׳ 2022
בתשובה לפוסט של

That's beautiful! It reminds me of Marvell's The Garden: ". . . annihilating all that's made / To a green thought in a green shade."


I suggest making syllable-deletion integral to the creative process. My polished haiku invariably consist of fewer syllables than my first drafts. Revision follows inspiration like expansion and contraction, breathing, a heartbeat.

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Nitu Yumnam
Nitu Yumnam
02 בספט׳ 2022

2/9/22 #1

Chicken Tikka... the Brahmin’s face sizzles red


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Nitu Yumnam
Nitu Yumnam
02 בספט׳ 2022
בתשובה לפוסט של

Same here. He he :)

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Namratha  Varadharajan
Namratha Varadharajan
01 בספט׳ 2022

Revised thanks to Daipayan and Ashish

in the pandal

the pitter-patter of rain

and off-tune bhajans


Original version:

in the pandal—

pitter-patter of rain

and off-tune bhajans


*pandal - (in India) a temporary shed erected for religious/other gathering

**bhajan - a devotional song


feedback appreciated

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Namratha  Varadharajan
Namratha Varadharajan
02 בספט׳ 2022
בתשובה לפוסט של

i think the em dash has more become a personal practice than a necessity. I agree it works without it as well

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Satyanarayana Chittaluri
Satyanarayana Chittaluri
01 בספט׳ 2022

no time to speak -

busy bees

all


- Chittaluri Satyanarayana


*feedback appreciated.

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Radhamani Sarma
Radhamani Sarma
01 בספט׳ 2022

cat’s mew

milk container exhausted

sad looks on both

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