HAIKUsutradhar : weekly prompts
A FRIDAY FEATURE
hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang
month of September: Shreya Narang
Open Prompt : Open Hall
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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!
founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh
associate editors:
Ashish Narain
Firdaus Parvez
Priti Aisola Shalini Pattabiraman
Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar
Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA. At the moment we are not looking at found poetry. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Earlier in the year Associate Editors K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar also stepped down for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_
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For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ...Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG.' Such good poems are posted.
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The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:
1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in a day ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.
3. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!
4. Post only your unpublished, original poems.
5. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. _()_
Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.
Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.
4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.
Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.
On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)
Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.
Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.
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The Prompt
He Ho. He Ho.
Yes! here we are with the OPEN HALL (open prompt) of HAIKUsutradhar for the month of September. An opportunity for all to let the wings of their creativity spread wide and fly in the sky of twinkling words. Write whatever comes to your mind, whatever your heart feels, whatever your eyes see, whatever sounds your ears are dancing to, spell your voice, and tell us what reflects your soul the most. We are waiting for your amazing poetry, holding our breath.
Give us your best shot.
#3 30.09.2022 - Revised version (thank you @Srinivas Sambangi)
shielded flower
that winter eve plucked away
kanyadaan
Kanyadaan is a symbolic marriage ritual where the father of the Bride places his daughters right hand in the Groom's right hand, for the groom to take his daughter as an equal partner. Through this ritual, the father approves of the groom as well. The word kanyadaan means "giving away the bride".
Original version:
that winter eve
plucked away a shielded flower
- kanyadaan
(feedback welcome)
The final version:
the M i l k y W a y
between dormitory
and dining hall
Modified version : Thank Kala and Vandana for your suggestions. I have modified the haiku:
2
between the dormitory
and the dining hall
Milky Way
Post 2
Milky Way...
between the dormitory
and the dining hall
ping of hailstones
on the old shed roof . . .
this solitude
Feedback welcome
---Billie
#2 30.09.2022 - Revised version (thank you @Srinivas Sambangi and @Ron Russell)
deafening thunder...
branches below balcony
drench a romeo
#2 29.09.2022 [Original version]
deafening thunder...
rustling branches below balcony
a drenched romeo
(feedback welcome)
#3. 29/09/2022
pillow fort— she speaks royal gibberish