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HAIKUsutradhar : 22nd April 2022

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of april: Marietta McGregor


Picture Prompt . Broken Spider's Web


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Akila G.

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Madhuri Pillai

Priti Aisola

Shalini Pattabiraman

Shobhana Kumar

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury

Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA. At the moment we are not looking at found poetry. ..................................................................................................... For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE LINKS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ........................................................................................................ The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal from December 2021 onwards! Due to to the sudden increase in the activity, here are some quick guidelines, for all the three groups:

1. TWO poems per day.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished poems.


Poems previously published on your personal webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, it is the poet's duty to decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


This web is very neatly woven except for one area. Did a captive break free? Perhaps a bird blundered into the web. Or was the spider interrupted in its weaving task?




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Devoshruti Mandal
Devoshruti Mandal
Apr 30, 2022

destroyed dream through the hole of a spider 's web her old doll's house


Or


destroyed dream ...

through the hole of a spider's web

old doll's house

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Devoshruti Mandal
Devoshruti Mandal
May 07, 2022
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Noted Ma'am. Will edit.

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Nani Mariani
Nani Mariani
Apr 29, 2022

he continues to work

go outside like spiders do

family is number one

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Apr 29, 2022
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Nani,

I'm sorry to say this is not haiku at all. I had suggested you read some essays a month back. Did you study them? Unless you do some homework - this way of posting won't take ypu any further. This haiku is reading like three separate sentences.

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Nani Mariani
Nani Mariani
Apr 28, 2022

watering the flowers

between branches

beautiful braid

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Apr 29, 2022
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Please read what Ashish has suggested.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 28, 2022

torn silk ...

the struggle to spin

her world continues


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Ashish Narain
Ashish Narain
Apr 28, 2022

Simple and heartfelt. That's what makes haiku memorable. Here's one by Shiki I thought exemplifies this:


After killing

a spider, how lonely I feel

in the cold of night!


- Masaoka Shiki (translator unknown)

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Apr 29, 2022
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Thank you so much!

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