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HAIKUsutradhar : 20th January 2023

Updated: Jan 23, 2023

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

Lev Hart becomes the MENTOR for HAIKUsutradhar from 21 November 2022. Thank you.


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of January: Lev Hart



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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez Hemapriya Chellappan

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai, Akila G., K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar stepped down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted in these forums. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies and contest winners that were published elsewhere will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


Lev Hart is our mentor and also our prompter for the month. Get ready to visit/re-visit and explore some basics of haiku in your writing. Let's seal our fundamentals now for the rest of this year! Here comes some food for thought and action.


Two weeks ago, we read Buson's haiku about a lost sandal; one week ago, Shiki's haiku about a kettle creaking in the wind. Here is a third haiku about everyday objects, by the first and greatest of the four recognized haiku masters, Basho:


awakened

a water jar cracks

in the cold night


Your mission, should you decide to accept it, is to write haiku that similarly find the poetry in everyday objects. Set them in the context of nature, e.g.: a sandal in the pond, a kettle in the wind, a water jar in the winter night.


Option 1: Like the haiku by Buson and Shiki in our previous prompts, Basho's answers three questions: What? (A cracking sound.) Where? (From a water jar outside the house). When? (The winter night.) Similarly, you might try writing your ku about everyday objects in response to the three-question template. The questions can be answered in any order.


Option 2: Like last week's haiku about a creaking sound, Basho's poem focuses on the auditory, rather than the visual. Similarly, you might try writing your ku about everyday objects in a way that focuses on their sound, taste, touch, or smell.


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Radhamani Sarma
Radhamani Sarma
Jan 26, 2023

haiku #3

26 /01/2023


bulging purse

denominated notes

her stairs’ catch


comments are welcome

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Lev Hart
Lev Hart
Jan 26, 2023
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Perhaps:


bulging purse

her stairs catch the fluttering

rupees


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wanda amos
wanda amos
Jan 26, 2023

#1


deep winter

seeking company

and a cup of chai


feedback welcome

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wanda amos
wanda amos
Jan 28, 2023
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Thank You Dipankar for your comments

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John Pappas
John Pappas
Jan 25, 2023

#2


1.25.23


sudden gust

the clouds change

their names


Feedback welcome.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jan 26, 2023
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This is good, John.


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Muskaan Ahuja
Muskaan Ahuja
Jan 25, 2023

winter night —

the sound of rain

behind the curtains

Feedback always welcome

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Muskaan Ahuja
Muskaan Ahuja
Jan 27, 2023
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Thanks, Dipankar!

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Devoshruti Mandal
Devoshruti Mandal
Jan 25, 2023

#3

Edited after @Lev and @John Pappas' suggestions -


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winter sky

through laundry on the line

balcony view

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terrace view through hang dry clothes winter sky

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Please write your comment.

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Devoshruti Mandal
Devoshruti Mandal
Jan 26, 2023
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Yeah I didn't notice that extra syllable point. Really I am learning a lot from you Lev. My heartfelt gratitude. Will edit.