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HAIKUsutradhar : 19th September 2025


A FRIDAY FEATURE


Host: Gauri Dixit Mentor: Kanjini Devi

Prompter for September : Nitu Yumnam


OUR MISSION

1. To provide a new poetry workshop each Friday, along with a prompt.

2. To select haiku, senryu, and haiga each month for the journal, haikuKATHA. Each issue will select poems that were posted in this forum from the 3rd of the previous month to the 2nd of the current month.


FEEDBACK GUIDELINES ( Included as a guideline, please do not be constrained by these while proving feedback )


Let the feedback be specific and constructive. Don’t be vague. Here are some helpful lines you could use to give feedback.


What is working for me :

1. The seasonal reference is good.

2. The image is very clear.

3. I love the internal rhythm.

4. When read aloud, the poem flows well.

5. The 'cut' which is so important in haiku is effectively done here.

6. I like the format ...it's short,long, short. Nice

7. I love the indent you have given


Points that aren't working for me:

1. The image is abstract

2. The lines are long.

3. Some words are redundant and can be safely removed.

4. The lightness of haiku isn't here.

5. Abstract words take away the haiku's charm

6. There is no 'cut' (kire) in this haiku.

7. There are two kigo (seasonal words) in this ku.

8. This is reading more like free verse.

9. This ku is reading as three separate lines. There is no connect.

SUBMISSION GUIDELINES

1. Post a maximum of two verses per week, from Friday to Friday, numbered 1 & 2. Post only one haiku in a day, in 24 hours.

2. Only post unpublished verses --- nothing that has appeared in peer-reviewed or edited journals, anthologies, your webpage, social media, etc.

3. Only post original verses.

4. For each poem you post, comment on one other person’s poem.

5. Give feedback only to those poets who have requested it.

6. Do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem is to appear in each original post.

7. Post each revision, if you have any, above the original. The top version will be your submission to haikuKATHA. Do not delete the original post.

8. Do not submit found poetry or split sequences.

9. Do not post photos, except for haiga.


10. haikuKATHA will only consider haiga that showcase original artwork or photos. Post details re: the source of the visual image. If you team up with an artist or photographer, make sure that it’s their original work and that they are not restricted by other publications to share it. We won't be responsible for any copyright issues.


11. Put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions.


12. Notification about all selected poems for each issue will be posted on CELEBRATION -on 10th of each month.


Poems that do not follow the guidelines may be deleted.

Founder/Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Monthly Journal: Kala Ramesh

Associate Editors: Ashish Narain Firdaus Parvez Priti Aisola Sanjuktaa Asopa Shalini Pattabiraman Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar Vidya Shankar

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PROMPT:

19th September

Nitu Yumnam


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Week 3: Insects in Flight


This week, our haiku take to the air, exploring the world of insects in flight—butterflies, dragonflies, bees, moths, and more. These creatures show us movement, color, and transformation, flitting between flowers, sunlight, and sky.


Observe the delicate flutter of wings, the patterns of flight, the quiet hum or sudden dart. Flying insects connect the earth and sky, bringing lightness and energy to the natural world.


Here are some example haiku to inspire your poems:


damselfly

the breeze gains

a new hue


–Seby Ciobica, Romania


bell curve

a bumblebee bends

a blade of grass


–Ianis Baetu, Romania


storm damage

winter fireflies cluster

on a maple stump


-Kristen Lindquist, United States


This week, write haiku that capture the beauty and motion of insects in flight. Let your words lift and hover like wings on the breeze.

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Looking forward to reading your haiku. Poems outside the prompt can also be posted.

Write on! Gauri

287 Comments


#2 25)09

Revision 1 Thanks a lot Alan🌺


a farmer dreams

the final harvest

of locust


Fatma Zohra Habis/ Algeria


The original


bitter harvest

old farmer dreams

of locust


Feedback welcome 🌺

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Many thanks, Alan, for this valuable information and for your suggestions, which continually enrich the beauty of haiku🙏🙏🌺


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deepening dusk

a bumblebee drops a load

from the midair


Tejendra Sherchan

Kathmandu, Nepal


#2 Original


bumblebee carries

a load up in the midair

and drops it


Tejendra Sherchan

Kathmandu, Nepal


Comments welcome.

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Does this also work?


deepening dusk

a bumblebee drops a load

in midair


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sugar grains

ferried one by one

scent of home


Kavita Ratna

India

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Feedback most welcome


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re:

sugar grains

ferried one by one

scent of home


I have pondered over this a lot! Sometimes we want to say a lot and cannot sacrifice a single word.


What feels important is not only 'home' and we don't want to lose 'a scent of home' but added context i.e. which critters are taking away our sugar! 😀🐜🐜🐜🐜🐜🐜🐜🐜


Having lived in Queensland, Australia, I learnt quickly not to leave even a single grain of sugar on the kitchen worktop!


Therefore, something like this, at least as a starter draft before the very final version?


ant paths . . .

sugar grains ferried

to a scent of home


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mona bedi
mona bedi
Sep 24

Haiga

24.9.25

Revised thanks to Alan:


folding into

the glow of fireflies

city dusk


Original:


city lights the fading glow of fireflies


Mona Bedi

India


Feedback appreciated:)


ree

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Sep 25
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Thanks😊

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#1 24/09


child’s hands—

wings

that never fly


Fatma Zohra Habis/Algeria


Feedback welcome 🌹


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How about?


butterfly wings in the child's hands


Let the reader infer that the butterfly can no longer fly, as for the child, the reader can interpret the whys.

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