HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts
A FRIDAY FEATURE
hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang
month of August: Yesha Shah
Picture prompt
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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!
founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh
associate editors:
Akila G. Ashish Narain
Firdaus Parvez
Madhuri Pillai
Priti Aisola
Shalini Pattabiraman
Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar
Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA.
At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.
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For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ...
Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME
and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY
It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight'
'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG'
Such good poems are posted.
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The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month.
Due to the sudden increase in the activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:
1. Just ONE poem per day/ in 24 hours.
2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!
3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.
4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. _()_
Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.
Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.
4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.
Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.
On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)
Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.
Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.
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The Prompt
moksha chants
I sidestep
strolling earthworms
Even the lifeless stump of a chopped tree nourishes life. The past is but a part of us…
splitting hosta
the old roots
settle in silence
*feedback welcome
fermented ivy
the aftertaste of
mushrooms
feedback❤️Please
violet shimmer
an earthworm
unearthed
*feedback always appreciated
greenery once upon a time now for last rites
half-naked at the window
... the sparrows, they've seen
stranger things
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Okay, some thoughts:
I know the sentence structure is unconventional :) But I've been going over some old haiku translated from Japanese (I quote them a lot to the point of looking like an arrogant idiot but they are the basis for all of what we strive for, so I can't help) and this sort of framing of sentences and images is quite common it looks like, especially for comic and humor scenes. So I'm trying to analyse these haiku to understand when and where it works. For sure, I love reading such haiku and so writing them too even if it likely doesn't go over too well.…