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HAIKUsutradhar : 17th March 2023

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

Lev Hart becomes the MENTOR for HAIKUsutradhar from 21 November 2022. Thank you.


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of March: Srinivas Sambangi



Textual prompt


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez Hemapriya Chellappan

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar stepped down earlier in the year for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all these three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies and contest winners that were published elsewhere will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt



Poem for this week is on millions of unfortunate children in India and elsewhere who do not know who their parents are and when they were born. In the words of Sigmund Freud, a thought is an action in rehearsal. Perhaps editors wanted me to have this rehearsal several times to understand the life of an orphan. So, they rejected my poem several times. Several times I became an orphan in my thoughts to write this final version. Thanks to Cattails for publishing it at last.


horoscope

an orphan reads

every sun sign

(Cattails, October 2022)


Do you empathize with these children and be kind enough to write a poem on this subject this week?

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Kavitha Sreeraj
Kavitha Sreeraj
Mar 24, 2023

#2

sponsored birthday lunch . . .

a child asks the care taker

his date of birth


Or

sponsored lunch . . .

birthday child asks another

his date of birth


Feedbacks welcome

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Firdaus Parvez
Firdaus Parvez
Mar 24, 2023

# 1 24/03/23


syrupy jalebis ...

the street urchin eats

with his eyes


or


drooling jalebis ...

the street urchin eats

with his eyes


feedback welcome. :)

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Nisha Raviprasad
Nisha Raviprasad
Mar 24, 2023
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Loved the first one.

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tejisethi13
tejisethi13
Mar 24, 2023

#2



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tejisethi13
tejisethi13
Mar 25, 2023
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Thanks Steph, I saw this in a short movie where a slum boy barters his pick for a bouquet he wished to gift. It touched me.

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Iffah  Peerzada
Iffah Peerzada
Mar 24, 2023

#3 24/3/23 seven springs the urchin counts his age Feedback appreciated

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tejisethi13
tejisethi13
Mar 23, 2023

#1

Thank you Rupa, Kavitha, Padma, Lev, Barrie, Kala, Lakshmi, Linda, Marilyn for the inputs.

I agree with Linda that not every orphan is a ‘child’. I also agree with Lev and Kala that haiku needs to be more specific and ‘child’ creates a concrete imagery. In my case these were teenage children so I would go with the second version. Thanks again! Putting it on top.




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Firdaus Parvez
Firdaus Parvez
Mar 24, 2023
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Defnitely 'someone orphaned somewhere'

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