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HAIKUsutradhar : 13th January 2023

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

Lev Hart becomes the MENTOR for HAIKUsutradhar from 21 November 2022. Thank you.


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of January: Lev Hart



Textual prompt


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez Hemapriya Chellappan

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar stepped down earlier in the year for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies and contest winners that were published elsewhere will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


Lev Hart is our mentor and also our prompter for the month. Get ready to visit/re-visit and explore some basics of haiku in your writing. Let's seal our fundamentals now for the rest of this year! Here comes the second food for thought and action.


The imagery in haiku tends to be visual, but some focus on the other senses, e.g.:


winter wind

the kettle creaking

on its hook


This verse was written by Shiki, one of the four recognized haiku masters. The images are auditory. We can hear the creaking, as well as the wind. Your mission, should you decide to accept it, is to write haiku focusing on sound, touch, taste, or smell. Let your visual images be incidental. Try to avoid writing imaginatively or intellectually, in order to focus on sense-impressions.


Optional: Last week, we looked at a haiku by Buson that answered three simple questions: What? Where? and When? Shiki answers the same questions. What? Creaking. Where? From a kettle on its hook. When: Winter. Try writing your auditory, tactile, gustatory, or olfactory haiku in response to the three-question template. The questions can be answered in any order.


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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Jan 27, 2023

#2 27.01.2023


after-hours

snoozing ... under the blanket

icy foot-cuddle


(Thinking of droping 'icy' from L3, feedback welcome)

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K. Ramesh
K. Ramesh
Jan 20, 2023

#1


afternoon breeze...

the sound of a dry leaf

moving on the porch

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jan 19, 2023

NOTICE BOARD A complete list of selected poems (haiku, tanka and haibun) was PUT UP on CELEBRATION on 8 January, 12 days before!!!

Sadly, you guys didn't see it till today!

I hope this doesn't happen in future.

The SELECTION PROCESS for February Issue will be slightly delayed because of the Triveni Utsav happening on the 3, 4 & 5 of February.


So LOOK OUT for the selection news on CELEBRATION on 12th February for ISSUE 16.

Ok?

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Got it and sorry for the misunderstanding. Will be alert in future.

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@Kala Ramesh

Dear Kala, I have scrupulously avoided submitting elsewhere the poems I uploaded to haikuKATHA. It seems from your reply to Kavita that haiku submitted here are picked up for showcasing by the 7th or 8th of the "next month". Is there a way of knowing if any of my haiku from last month were chosen by the editors for the haikuKATHA issue for January 21? I am trying to collect my rejected haiku here to edit and submit elsewhere before deadlines run out. Sorry for the trouble. I know you are very busy with the UTSAV right now.

Best wishes for your efforts.

Dipankar

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jan 19, 2023
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This list was PUT UP on CELEBRATION on 8 January, 12 days before!!! Sadly, you guys didn't see it till today!

I hope this doesn't happen in future.


The SELECTION PROCESS for February Issue will be slightly delayed because of the Triveni Utsav happening on 3, 4 & 5 of February.


So LOOK OUT for the selection news on CELEBRATION on 12 th of February for ISSUE 16.

Ok?

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Jan 19, 2023

#1. 19.01.2023

Revised version, thank you so much Lev, Kala ma'am, and Marion!


biking to work

that stench ... on my left

a buffalo shed


Original:

biking to work

that stench on my left

a buffalo shed


(Feedback welcome)

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Jan 27, 2023
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Dear Marion, thank you so much for the compliment, and your suggestion! Indeed if my intention was to speed past the stench, this haiku would beautifully describe the emotion and scene...but I actually was not repulsed by it, and for the first time I want to keep the structure and flow of the haiku just the way it came to me. I want to intact the surprise right before 'that stench'...But I want to thank you again for the suggestion, it is written so well :)

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