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HAIKUsutradhar : 11th November 2022

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of November: Susan Burch



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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Earlier in the year Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar also stepped down for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


Home Alone

What did you do the last time you were home alone? Did you dance around? Were you scared? Were there unexplained noises or noise all around you? Write about something you did or heard or felt, or if you haven’t been alone, think about what you would do if you had the chance.

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Vidya Shankar
Vidya Shankar
Nov 17, 2022

wide-eyed in bed...

the darkness inside

the light outside


(feedback appreciated)

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Nov 17, 2022

Does this work? 🙄


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Richa Sharma
Richa Sharma
Nov 20, 2022
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Lovely. I really like this and the suggestions!

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#2 feedback welcome (corrected, thanks Lakshmi)


hostel room -

i buy dinner

for my absent roommate


Original:

hostel room -

i buy food

for my absent roommate


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Nov 17, 2022
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I don't see the effect you're going for.

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Arvinder Kaur
Arvinder Kaur
Nov 17, 2022

#1


revisiting all my sins solitary night


Feedback most welcome !


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mona bedi
mona bedi
Dec 12, 2022
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Oooh! Nice😊

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Nov 17, 2022

#2. 17.11.2022

Revised, thank you so much @Lev Hart


ear to the kitchen wall

live score

of my neighbors fight...


Original:

cat-footing

along the kitchen walls...

brawling neighbors


(feedback please)

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Disha Upadhyay
Disha Upadhyay
Nov 19, 2022
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Thank you for the suggestion, Lev! Let me sit with it for a while.

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