haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE TANKA - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Kala Ramesh
26 August 2023
Yeah! Another exciting week ahead!!
I have a new request and a suggestion to make.
Can you share a one-line tanka that you've enjoyed & tell your readers why you liked it and how you understood it?
Examples of 1-line tanka:
Enjoy the one-line tanka that were selected for haikuKATHA Issue 22
One-line tanka:
twilight teaching the mockingbird a new song iPhone-14Pro ringtone
Billie Dee
fragments of Sappho’s verses lost poetry between the pages of my blank diary
Firdaus Parvez
fights that began stay till the end their married years a wasteland of pretence
Kala Ramesh
saltwater taffy the bell on the door of a boardwalk shop jingles in jingles out Linda Papanicolaou
a walled courtyard in the nursing home no way to climb this mountain of insecurity
Lorraine Haig
prison's stone walls the color of bone shadows carve the quarry deeper
Lorraine Haig
a skein of geese off the cattail coast unraveling the wild part of me Marilyn Ashbaugh
For your own poems: Only TWO one-line tanka per week, per prompt, per poet.
First post: You'll search and find a one-line tanka, you like.
You'll give your reason/s why you like it. Second post: This will be your first one-line tanka.
Third post:
This will be your second one-line tanka.
Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_
Have fun! Keep writing and commenting!
My first attempt! Still trying to understand what a one-line tanka is.
#1 a phonograph with a hundred skips I tell myself it's over
(Feedback welcome. Please tell me if this works!)
I'm still trying to understand the difference between a five-line tanka and a one-line tanka. Is a one-line tanka a tanka that can't be written in five lines? I have a feeling it's more than that, but is it one of the reasons why a tanka is written as a one-line tanka?
This tanka below seems to be awkward if converted as a five-line tanka. I like that it is written as a one-line tanka instead. I chose it because I love the imagery and the feeling that comes with it. I can picture myself smiling as I watch a child turning around in circles and laughing. a maple leaf caught in the wind she turns circles of dance int…
# First tanka
a walk by the tree grove in an alien land too the birds sing of homecoming
Feedback welcome
First post
a skein of geese off the cattail coast unravelling the wild part of me
Marilyn Ashbaugh
This beautiful poem works for me for two reasons. One ‘ a skein of geese ‘ have always fascinated me for the multiple layers of meanings and implications inherent in it. Two these days I am really smitten by ‘ the wild part ‘ I have also written a poem about’ my wild streak’. Perhaps as we age such tropes really become appealing and you are not afraid of writing about them. Of course the way the poem is structured it has a nice flow. Well done Marilyn.
#2 29/8/23 comments welcome
rev. 1 Thank you, Alan.
inside the nautilus running to my winter's river old age
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