haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Kala Ramesh
22nd April 2023
I have a new request and a suggestion to make.
From now on - we take a one-line ku and ... read, internalise it and tell us what you understood from it. For your own poems: Only two one-line ku per week, per prompt, per poet.
First post: When you post, you'll make your first post as a comment on any one one-line, which is posted as an example.
You'll give your reason/s why you like it or why you don't like it. Whether you understand it or not. Second post: This will be your one-line ku.
Please give your feedback to others' commentary and poems too. _()_
Sample poems:
between waves the life of a footprint Srinivas S The Heron's Nest - June 2021
autumn leaf already i am attached
— Scott Metz ant ant ant ant ant - November 2011
heartwood something like forgiveness growing in the cut
— Marcie Wessels haikuKATHA 11 - September 2022
Have fun!
paper cut my blood streaks a poem
(feedback welcome)
autumn leaf already i am attached
— Scott Metz ant ant ant ant ant - November 2011
1. autumn leaf already
i am attached
2. autumn leaf
already i am attached
3. autumn leaf i am attached already
Some of the ways I read this lovely monoku (yes, they are beginning to grow on me). Reading the whole brings to mind attachments in old age that we are reluctant to give up. It reminds me of downsizing, having to throw away life's memorabilia, while losing your memory.
By creating the breaks differently I see different interpretations. A sense of age having caught up in #1; in #2 I feel like someone got attached a little earlier than they were plannin…
#2
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origami within my senses a curiosity
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Feedback please
#2
the narrative of his grief father's ellipses
Feedback Welcome
autumn leaf
Love this poem too as this is my favourite image, evokes myriad feelings always in me. Scott has put across the image so deftly and differently. congratulations Scott for this beauty.
Marcie’s poem is so poignant too. Such great selection of the examples