haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Richa Sharma
18th March, 2023
Dear poets,
Thank you so much for your active participation.
Summarizing the key questions asked so far:
How does one differentiate between a prose sentence and a one-line ku?
How does a poet decide between a monoku, duostich, tercet, or may be even a four-line verse?
Does a seasonal reference enhance or distract from the one-liner?
Is syllable count part of a one-liner?
What is gendai?
How do we decide where to end or finalize the one-line haiku?
It's time to start introducing poems by one-line haiku poets from all over the world. This week, I would like to share three poems by Dietmar Tauchner.
my mind wind's child
Roadrunner Journal
February 2009 Issue IX:1
Meanwhile, questions, discussions, and sharing of poems continue with an ever-widening space for contemplation, understanding, and joy. Please let me know how a poem becomes your personal favourite.
the child's eyes green beyond barbed wire
Tauchner, Dietmar. as far as i can see. Red Moon Press, 2010.
From the same e-book, here is another beautiful monoku.
effortless along the icy path a leaf
Thank you!
Best,
Richa
self−edited:
hugging
her
hugging
her
baby
mimosa
tree
original:
hugging
her
hugging
her
baby
mimosa
flowers
Really not sure if this works… Feedback please🙏
#2 23/3/23 feedback welcome
rev 2 thank you Richa and Linda.
springtide shore full of mist and mews
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rev 1 thank you Richa.
springtide
shore
gulls
full
of
mist
covered
mews
or
springtide shore gulls full of mist and mews
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springtide
gulls
full
of
mist
covered
mews
Richa,
Beautiful selection of ku from Dietmar, thank you! Regarding the selection of my favorite haiku, it is an intuitive process that is hard to describe. One that makes me feel deeply, touches my soul or one that surprises me and makes me think about something in a new way.
#1 22/3/23 feedback welcome
spring stars unwrapping a box of sky
Richa, to your question " how a poem becomes your favourite...", of the three poems Dietmar the second one " the child's eyes green beyond barbed wire " immediately stood out for me, perhaps because of the pivot word green and also the immediacy in it. It is able to evoke the emotion in me because of the vulnerable child and the harsh barbed wire.