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haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering! ONE-LINE haiku

Updated: Mar 24, 2023

haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree

host: Richa Sharma


18th March, 2023


Dear poets,

Thank you so much for your active participation.

Summarizing the key questions asked so far:

How does one differentiate between a prose sentence and a one-line ku?

  1. How does a poet decide between a monoku, duostich, tercet, or may be even a four-line verse?

  2. Does a seasonal reference enhance or distract from the one-liner?

  3. Is syllable count part of a one-liner?

  4. What is gendai?

  5. How do we decide where to end or finalize the one-line haiku?


It's time to start introducing poems by one-line haiku poets from all over the world. This week, I would like to share three poems by Dietmar Tauchner.


my mind wind's child


Roadrunner Journal

February 2009 Issue IX:1


Meanwhile, questions, discussions, and sharing of poems continue with an ever-widening space for contemplation, understanding, and joy. Please let me know how a poem becomes your personal favourite.


the child's eyes green beyond barbed wire


Tauchner, Dietmar. as far as i can see. Red Moon Press, 2010.


From the same e-book, here is another beautiful monoku.


effortless along the icy path a leaf


Thank you!

Best,

Richa


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Keiko Izawa
Keiko Izawa
2023年3月24日

self−edited:


hugging

her

hugging

her

baby

mimosa

tree


original:


hugging

her

hugging

her

baby

mimosa

flowers


Really not sure if this works… Feedback please🙏

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Keiko Izawa
Keiko Izawa
2023年3月24日
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Me too, thanks so much Richa🧡

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
2023年3月23日

#2 23/3/23 feedback welcome


rev 2 thank you Richa and Linda.


springtide shore full of mist and mews


<<<>>>


rev 1 thank you Richa.


springtide

shore

gulls

full

of

mist

covered

mews


or


springtide shore gulls full of mist and mews

<<<<>>>>

springtide

gulls

full

of

mist

covered

mews

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RS
RS
2023年3月25日
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No worries, Marilyn. You can finalize your version in this week. Thank you! It was a good discussion 🌺

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
2023年3月22日

Richa,

Beautiful selection of ku from Dietmar, thank you! Regarding the selection of my favorite haiku, it is an intuitive process that is hard to describe. One that makes me feel deeply, touches my soul or one that surprises me and makes me think about something in a new way.

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RS
RS
2023年3月24日
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Yes!

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
2023年3月22日

#1 22/3/23 feedback welcome

spring stars unwrapping a box of sky

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
2023年3月23日
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I wish one of us could say (or try to explain) why we like it.

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Meera Rehm
Meera Rehm
2023年3月22日

Richa, to your question " how a poem becomes your favourite...", of the three poems Dietmar the second one " the child's eyes green beyond barbed wire " immediately stood out for me, perhaps because of the pivot word green and also the immediacy in it. It is able to evoke the emotion in me because of the vulnerable child and the harsh barbed wire.

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Meera Rehm
Meera Rehm
2023年3月23日
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Thanks so much, Kala.

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