haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Kala Ramesh
8th July 2023
Yeah! We continue four-line this week too!
I have a new request and a suggestion to make.
Can you share a four-line ku that you've enjoyed & tell your readers why you liked it and how you understood it. For your own poems: Only TWO four-line ku per week, per prompt, per poet.
First post: You'll search and find a four-line haiku, you like.
You'll give your reason/s why you like it. Second post: This will be your first four-line ku.
Third post:
This will be your second 4-line ku.
Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_
Sample poem:
it looks as if
iris flowers had bloomed
on my feet -
sandals laced in blue
Matsuo Basho Tr: Nobuyuki Yuasa The Narrow Road to the Deep North and Other Travel Sketches
More of Basho's four-line ku: https://terebess.hu/english/haiku/basho2.html
a sacrificial goat
bleeds
the Kali temple
at the rivulet
Kala Ramesh
Presence Haiku Journal #39 Autumn 2009
Have fun! Keep writing and commenting!
#2, changed L 4 from 'the broken branches ' to 'its broken branches '. Thanks Alan.
scattered rains
the crow's hard caw
split across
its broken branches
Feedback please
2/12.7
autumn leaves
two old women
on bicycle path
dancing with the wind
Feedback welcome
Third post ( unpublished)
a week
of torrential rains
in the concrete jungle
no frog croaks
Feedback most welcome
#2---9July23
washing dishes the tink-tink-tink of her bangles a baby's lullaby
---Billie
feedback welcome
[18 syllables--too much?]
#3 my second ku.
a box of greens
from the farmer's market
a snail reaches the top
of the kale
Feedback welcome.