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haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering! death poems - JISEI

haikaiTALKS: death poems - JISEI

host: Kala Ramesh

19 August 2023

Shall we try one more week of death poems - Jisei? It can be a haiku or a tanka!


For your own poems: Only TWO ku per week, per prompt, per poet.

First post: You'll search and find one you like.

You'll give your reason/s why you like it.

hope

transcends mountains

every day mother comes around the tulsi praying for an easy death


Kala Ramesh

Second post: This will be your first ku.


Third post: This will be your second ku.

Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_

Keep writing and commenting!

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#2


at my eulogy crickets


Susan Burch

comments welcome

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#1


I am not worthy

of this crimson carpet:

autumn maple leaves.


KYOHAKU


Very relatable. I think it brings to mind questions of not only being worthy of such beauty in dying, but also in living. Have we lived our best life? Have we made mistakes? Have regrets? And whether we deserve it or not, these beautiful leaves there anyway, paving the way...

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Two death poems by my favorite waka poet, Otagaki Rengetsu (1791-1875). The second one is really noted to be a death poem What I noticed about these is the personal imagery— name meant called “Lotus Moon.”


ねがはくは月のかげにて秋しなんさらばやみにもまよはざらまし

Negawaku wa tsuki no kage ni teaki shina nsaraba yami ni mo mayowa zara mashi


My hope is to die

beneath the moon

in autumn

so that in the darkness

I will never be lost.


ねがはくはのちの蓮の花のうへにくもらぬ月をみるよしもがな

Negawaku wa nochi no hachisu no hana no ue nikumora nu tsuki wo miru yoshi moga na

My hope

finding a way

to behold

the cloudless moon

upon a lotus blossom in the next world.


http://rengetsu.org/poetry_db/?ct=clr


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Kanji Dev
Kanji Dev
24 באוג׳ 2023

#3 - 25/08/23


kauri snails

on the far side

of this rotting log

will my end be quick

or drawn out


Kanjini Devi


Kauri snails/pupurangi ( Paryphanta spp.) belong to the group of northern giant land snails, which contains some of New Zealand's largest snails. Would my tanka read better with 'giant land snails'in L1?

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Kanji Dev
Kanji Dev
25 באוג׳ 2023
בתשובה לפוסט של

Thank you, Marilyn. In New Zealand, Maori words are part of everyday conversations so its natural for me to use them in my poetry. Your feedback is most appreciated!

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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
24 באוג׳ 2023

Poem 3

23/08/23


a little cold

will these eyes

light again?


feedback welcome

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Rupa Anand
Rupa Anand
27 באוג׳ 2023
בתשובה לפוסט של

Just read everyones‘ responses. Well nothing v esoteric about the poem. Let me explain ~

L 1 ‘a little cold’ is a late autumn kigo representing ageing.

L 2 this means our physical eyes. Mine, in this poem. But the reader is free to infer whoever.

L 3 our sight or the faculty of ‘seeing’ is possible because of the presence of Consciousness. The eyes, per se, are mere equipment through which ‘seeing’ happens. So, when i sleep at night, will my eyes ‘see’ again in the morning or when I waken? OR will I be dead? As death can happen anytime. It’s a death poem, guys! further feedback welcome

@Alan Summers @Suraja Roychowdhury

@Padma Rajeswari @marilyn ashbaugh

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