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haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering! 22nd June

haikaiTALKS: season words / seasonal reference | a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree


host: Lev Hart

22nd June 2024

haikaiTALKS: a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree


THE SEASONS: Part 3


In previous weeks, we have focused on the relationship between the season and the moment. In Sangita’s haiku, we see a similar relationship, this time expressing the spirit of Autumn:


         wet footprints

         on the temple floor

         fall leaves


        (Sangita Kalarickal, Sep 15, 2023)


The phrase could evoke an infinite number of meanings and feelings, depending on the fragment combined with it. In the context of “fall leaves,” the phrase expresses sabi. Soon the leaves will be swept away, whether by the fall wind, or by the cleaner. The footprints will dry. Even the temple will someday disappear. In traditional haiku, the gods themselves do not appear to be above the cycle of seasons. Rather, they are part of it. In Sangita’s verse, Autumn itself appears to be departing, i.e.: “autumn leaves.” The fragment becomes contextualized by the phrase. The leaves might even resemble the footsteps, trails of wet footprints and wet leaves gleaming on the floor, one a tacit metaphor for the other. This week, we see again that seasonal references deepen haiku.


Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to write two haiku, using kigo for Autumn, or for Monsoon. You can choose a kigo from one of the saijiki below, or you can make up your own, as Sangita did. Use the kigo to represent the season and add a phrase that shows us the moment, as Sangita did, to show us something about the essence of Autumn. You can find Monsoon kigo by clicking the second link:


The 500 Essential Japanese Season Words:



indian subcontinent SAIJIKI:




Your host for haikaiTALKS Lev Hart


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Thank you for doing this for us, Lev. Members,

Please give your feedback on others' commentary and poems too. _()_

This is an exciting phase for haikaiTALKS! Have fun! Keep writing and commenting! _kala

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#1 apple picking

— climbing ladders

toward forgotten dreams Sandip Chauhan, USA feedback welcome

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Sandip Chauhan
Sandip Chauhan
6 days ago
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thank you, Barrie

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#1


pregnant clouds

any moment now

...water burst


welcoming constructive feedback

tanvi

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heavy clouds

sirens drown

chirping


Namratha Varadharjan, India


Feedback welcome

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#2


autumn sunset…

feeding leftover bread

to a stray


Keiko Izawa, Japan

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Thank you, Lev. Revised.

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edited:


after the plane crash she's yet to find her son's body ... falling leaves


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aircraft buried

       in fallen leaves

she’s yet to locate the son's body


Kala Ramesh

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feedback welcome.

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Kala,

To me your last version still reads like something else rather than a haiku. And toriawase seems a bit too direct…Just my own impression, though🙁

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