HAIKUsutradhar : 11th April 2025
- Gauri
- Apr 11
- 3 min read
Updated: Apr 13
A FRIDAY FEATURE
Host: Gauri Dixit
Prompter for April: Lorraine Haig
OUR MISSION
1. To provide a new poetry workshop each Friday, along with a prompt.
2. To select haiku, senryu, and haiga each month for the journal, haikuKATHA. Each issue will select poems that were posted in this forum from the 3rd of the previous month to the 2nd of the current month.
FEEDBACK GUIDELINES ( Included as a guideline, please do not be constrained by these while proving feedback )
Let the feedback be specific and constructive. Don’t be vague. Here are some helpful lines you could use to give feedback.
What is working for me :
1. The seasonal reference is good.
2. The image is very clear.
3. I love the internal rhythm.
4. When read aloud, the poem flows well.
5. The 'cut' which is so important in haiku is effectively done here.
6. I like the format ...it's short,long, short. Nice
7. I love the indent you have given
Points that aren't working for me:
1. The image is abstract
2. The lines are long.
3. Some words are redundant and can be safely removed.
4. The lightness of haiku isn't here.
5. Abstract words take away the haiku's charm
6. There is no 'cut' (kire) in this haiku.
7. There are two kigo (seasonal words) in this ku.
8. This is reading more like free verse.
9. This ku is reading as three separate lines. There is no connect.
SUBMISSION GUIDELINES
1. Post a maximum of two verses per week, from Friday to Friday, numbered 1 & 2. Post only one haiku in a day, in 24 hours.
2. Only post unpublished verses --- nothing that has appeared in peer-reviewed or edited journals, anthologies, your webpage, social media, etc.
3. Only post original verses.
4. For each poem you post, comment on one other person’s poem.
5. Give feedback only to those poets who have requested it.
6. Do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem is to appear in each original post.
7. Post each revision, if you have any, above the original. The top version will be your submission to haikuKATHA. Do not delete the original post.
8. Do not submit found poetry or split sequences.
9. Do not post photos, except for haiga.
10. haikuKATHA will only consider haiga that showcase original artwork or photos. Post details re: the source of the visual image. If you team up with an artist or photographer, make sure that it’s their original work and that they are not restricted by other publications to share it. We won't be responsible for any copyright issues.
11. Put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions.
Poems that do not follow the guidelines may be deleted.
Founder/Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Monthly Journal:
Kala Ramesh
Associate Editors: Ashish Narain Firdaus Parvez Priti Aisola Sanjuktaa Asopa Shalini Pattabiraman Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar Vidya Shankar
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PROMPT:
11th April
Lorraine Haig
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Week 2
A picnic
You have a day off and are going on a picnic. Are you taking the family, friends, your parents or partner or just the dog? Perhaps you plan to go to the local park and lie on a rug under the trees. Maybe it will be a trip to the beach or a hike up a mountain. A day out picking fruit for homemade chutneys. Pack your favourite foods, drinks and whatever else you may need for a day out. Don’t forget the picnic rug.
Boxing Day picnic
sudden shower
dilutes the punch
Irene McGuire
swimming hole
towels line the low branch
of a river gum
Gavin Austin
blackberry season
a soft blue haze
on the hills
Lyn Reeves
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Looking forward to reading your haiku. Poems outside the prompt can also be posted.
Write on! Gauri
haiku #2
Revision:
gingham & tartan
the tea we spill over and over
our checkered pasts
Old/Original version:
gingham vs tartan
and checkered pasts
we spill tea instead
Alan Summers
UK
#1
Ron C. Moss
Tasmania, Australia
#1 17/04/25
long summers ago
each one of us sporting
a milkshake moustache
Firdaus Parvez, India
Comments welcomed. :)
17th April, 2025
Happy Haiku Day!
thunderstorm days
a trill in the morning
call of robins
Sangita Kalarickal
Minnesota, USA
feedback welcome. I wonder if thunderstorm is a kigo
#1
riverbank picnic
a scent of canned sardines
from your fingertips
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
Feedback welcome