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writeALONG! 27 February

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: an'ya


Please note: 


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems (haiku/senryu) that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!

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“Be open to feedback and continuously improve.”

     --- Orville Reddenbockerco

 

There are many different types of haiku, this is a “question haiku by a very talented haijin:

 


hillwalkers

how many footsteps

make a track

 

--- Debbie Strange, Canada

 


Debbie’s haiku is an unanswerable question unless you hike that hill and count the steps yourself. For every person who might do this, depending on their age, physical size, their walking stride, etc. each person would come up with a different conclusion which enhances the meaning of this question haiku:

 

This next one is a “statement” haiku where line 1 deepens into line 2, and then line 2 deepens into line 3 which gives us an example of what is known as the “aha” moment, or a realization contained within a statement made by the poet, for instance:

 

 

mosquito bite!

as a mother it’s mine

to understand

 

--- an’ya

 

 

Question and Statement Prompt: Please post a statement and /or a question haiku of your own and perhaps explain how and why it works as such. 

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Dear an'ya


Thank you so much for contributing to thinkALONG! and providing consistent feedback to all the poets. Grateful for your time and efforts spent in enriching our haikai community!


Best wishes

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Thank you anya for your kind and encouraging support. Thank you team for bringing this together.

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Post 2

01.3.24


Rx

daily once at bedtime

Confessions


Jharna Sanyal

Kolkata India


(statement haiku)

feedback welcome

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Hi Jharna, and very good pivot in this one, plus 2 things stated. Thank you. love ya, an'ya

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#2 Revision

01-03-24


aren't the rocks

chiselled by waves perfect

as they are?


Padma Priya

India


Thank you @tanka anya for your feedback on the ku and the photograph.



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#1 Revision

01-03-24


chiselled by waves

aren’t the rocks 

perfect as they are?


Padma Priya

India


Thank you @Kala Ramesh for your feedback.



#2

01-03-24


chiselled by waves

aren’t the rocks 

perfect as they are?


Padma Priya

India

(feedback welcome)



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Thank you anya. You are very kind and encouraging while helping with needed corrections.

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#2 29.2.24


Revision:


a cyclist

drifts into stillness

planted primroses


C.X. Turner, UK


Original:


a cyclist

walking past

planted primroses


C.X. Turner, UK


(statement haiku, feedback welcome)

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I do too Luci! love ya, an'ya

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Post 1

01.3.24


confession --

at the end of the day

do I need to


Jharna Sanyal

Kolkata India


feedback welcome

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Thank you,an'ya!

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