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writeALONG! 21 June

A TUESDAY FEATURE

host: Muskaan Ahuja

guest editor: Lakshmi Iyer


Continuing from last week about the navarasa, let's take the next three:

Adbhuta, Bibatsa and Veera.


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Adbhuta/ wonder


sunrise ...

the ooh and aah's at the sight

of Mt. Kanchenjunga

.

Bibatsa/ disgust


ancestor's property ...

legal notice sent

to the father

.

Veera/ bravery


freedom struggle ...

huge massacres

in the history of battles



--- Lakshmi Iyer


Post your poems or share the ones you once read and that fit under each rasa.

Looking forward how you take the challenge...


24 Comments


Robert Kingston
Jun 25, 2022

the pugilist

squaring up to

the young blood

veera/bravery

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Jun 25, 2022
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Thanks for being here.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jun 24, 2022

disgust/bibasta


somewhere

between thirst and non-thirst ...

the everchanging me


?

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Jun 25, 2022
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Actually, disgust is half abstract and half real. You want to show it fully and yet it comes out half-heartedly. I didn't get what you wanted to say. Though the meaning is coming through. 'thirst and non-thirst' seems like Vedanta to me.

Maybe


stuck between countless

choices and the chosen

the i

.

I am sorry.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Jun 24, 2022

wonder/adbhuta a blue whale leaps …

the sky vanishes

into nothing

for a split second

where was i


.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Jun 25, 2022
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Yes!! As usual, beautiful.

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
Jun 23, 2022

Rewrite: (Adbhuta)


revision:

sudden starboard tilt . . .

Everest comes into view below the wing


original:

sudden port-side list--- Mt. Everest comes into view just below the wing


Thank you Kala

---Billie, Kiku Makura



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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Jun 24, 2022
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Thanks Billie for your valid haiku and comments.

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Janice Doppler
Janice Doppler
Jun 23, 2022

Bibatsa/ disgust


ripe tomato

in my hand

slug slime

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Janice Doppler
Janice Doppler
Jun 28, 2022
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I was thinking of picking a ripe tomato that had a unseen slug on it and accidentally touching a slug. It happened to me, was so gross.

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