A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer
guest editor: Vandana Parashar
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We, humans, tend to look for music and rhythm in everything around us. Whether it’s the rhythm of the rain or the thumping heart of our loved one, whether it’s a birdsong or a hit number by our favourite singer, the music is therapeutic and reassuring. But, it's always said that rhyming should be avoided in haiku.
Should it always be the case or can sometimes an unintentional rhyming take the haiku to a new height?
Take Edward’s ku as an example and try to write haiku with an inherent rhythm and see how your heart dances to that.
rain on dew
the you
in your daughter’s eulogy
--- Edward Cody Huddleston
Rhyme has a place, it occurs naturally in Japanese endings anyway, it may be unfashionable in the free verse poetry establishment, but it can add musicalty and help to tie words and meanings together. I think it's counter-productive to exclude it altogether. It's part of "euphony" which seems to be a more palatable term. Basho advised refining haiku 'a thousand times upon the lips.'
A few examples where conscious rhyme is effectively employed (see the romaji):
samukaro, kayukaro, hito ni aitakaro
(You must be cold, you must be itching and you must be wanting to see other human beings. Shiki)
misoka tsuki nashi / chitose no sugi o / daku arashi (7 -7 -5)
(last night of the month, no…
#1 24 September comments welcome
entropic doom my son's untidy room
Keith Evetts
UK
#2, 21/9
after the rains
gurgle of frogs
in the giggles of kids
Lakshmi Iyer, India
feedback please
Second poem:
cemetery
people
becoming
cherry
blossoms
Lev Hart
Calgary, Canada
["cherry blossoms" is a spring kigo. feedback welcome.]
Post #1
20.9.23
autumn breeze
the p i a n i s s i m o
of falling leaves
Mona Bedi
India
Feedback appreciated:(