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triveni spotlight: 29th March 2023

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh GUEST EDITOR: John Stevenson



the shadow in the folded napkin


Cor van den Heuvel

The Haiku Anthology



This month is going to be a treat for our members. _()_ Thank you so much, John.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Mar 30, 2023

The fleeting moment of that 'folding' is the highlight and leaves room for the readers to guess 'whose' is that? Beautiful! Wish we could have more details of the poem from the poet.

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Keith Evetts
Keith Evetts
Mar 29, 2023

An example of a haiku without a cut — one reason that Paul Miller thinks it is really half a haiku. Van den Heuvel tried to find another image to go with it, but decided that it stood as it was.


There are plenty of impeccable precedents for haiku as a run-on sentence with or without a clear and contrasting juxtaposition (ichimonojitate and ichibutsujitate IIRC): Shiki, Hosai, Santoka... And our Guest Editor is a masterly exponent of these too.


This has been said to be a single-image haiku, e.g. by Marlene Mountain. But is it? I see two visual elements, the carefully folded napkin, white by default, and the imperfection of the shadow "in" it. The subtle contrast/toriawase leaves plen…


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Keith Evetts
Keith Evetts
Mar 30, 2023
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Well, CVdH explored the minimal, as exemplified in "tundra". And for me, it's a bit of a stretch to find two juxtaposed/related images in the shadow and the napkin...but... just about. Exploring where the limits might be is one thing. Whether we then want to go there is another!

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Mar 29, 2023

This one-line took my breath away when I first chanced upon it many years back. What a strong imagery. So complete in itself.

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