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triveni spotlight : 25 august

triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh guest editor: Billie Dee

Theme: Close Observation



the tablecloth shaken over the lawn starry night

Susan Antolin Walnut Creek, California, USA Antolin, Susan. Artichoke Season. Walnut Creek, CA: Spare Poems Press, 2009.


I am pleased to submit the following selected poems from my personal "favorite haiku" list, one I've developed over the last 30 years or so. All have been approved by the authors; all include publication credits (except one from Patricia Machmiller which is unpublished); all are from the U.S. Pacific coastal rim (my region). I have chosen "close observation" as my theme, a guiding principle in my own writing, and a core element IMO for developing a Haiku Mind.

Peace,

Billie Dee


p.s. Under-lined book titles have embedded links where a reader can go to purchase the book.


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Oh, I love this! I see a creation myth in it. I’m reminded of a Navajo legend about the night sky. The creator had a bag of stars and was putting them out into the night sky in an orderly fashion. The coyote became impatient, grabbed the bag of stars, and threw them. I have read that Navajo culture prices orderliness, and so this myth explains why the stars are so chaotically arranged.


Now following this we have Susan’s haiku — the well-cut grass and a tablecloth. I feel as if order has been reestablished.


Haha— I know I have read way too much into this, but it’s late at night, the stars are bright tonight, and I happen to…

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Aug 25, 2022

Most beautifully tuned to your theme - Billie.

Great choice. I hope Susan get here ... it would be lovely to have her here :))

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 25, 2022

Beautiful! The actions shake hands so well.

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