triveni spotlight: 17th April 2023
- Kala Ramesh
- Apr 17, 2023
- 1 min read
triveni spotlight A FEATURE EVERY ALTERNATE DAY! hosts: Teji Sethi and Kala Ramesh GUEST EDITOR: Ashish Narain
on the first day of spring
snow falling
from one bough to another
Virginia Brady Young
In D. E. Navarro. 2021. The True Power of the Preposition
in Haiku. AllPoetry.com
This month is going to be a treat for our members. _()_ Thank you so much, Ashish.
everything that Ashish said, plus:
I do like the sound repetition of “o” vowels in every line. masterful!
the young cherry taking its time to bloom
I like this poem because of how each line adds something new for the reader to chew on. L1 lays the timing of the poem- its the first day of spring. L2 tells the reader that snow is falling- which leads the reader to think that spring is delayed- sad but not an unlikely occurrence. L3 then adds more information- the snow is falling from bough to bough, perhaps because its actually a nice spring day and winter is receding as it actually should! Its that element of surprise in each line that is most appealing about this ku.