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thinkALONG! 22nd August

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Shloka Shankar


Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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“My tongue is pickled in a jar of ink.”


— “Vestiges” by Ángel García

When I first read this line in Garcia’s poem, I got goosebumps. So, my questions for you are:

– How do you achieve a sense of timelessness in your work? Are they worth “preserving”?

– Which poem of yours would you consider timeless?

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Paradoxically, I think it is those poems that most perfectly capture a “haiku moment” that also most perfectly capture timelessness because they effectively stop time. Thinking which of my haiku are most timeless, here is the one that came to mind—it placed first in the 2009 Kukai at the Yuki Teikei Retreat in Asilomar and it still feels right to me.


dune wind—

the blackened seedpods

of a bush lupine


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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 24, 2023

#1


lukewarm response another blackout in cold war


feedback please, just a try

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
Aug 24, 2023

Very difficult to maintain 'timelessness'. I have one or two of mine which i believe may have this quality of this being ...


gunshot pigeons burst open the muezzin's call

Whiptail Journal, Issue 6


chemotherapy one more full moon

haikuKATHA, Issue 19

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lev hart
lev hart
Aug 22, 2023

Re: 'How do you achieve a sense of timelessness in your work?"


I hope to achieve a sense of timelessness in my haiku through kigo. A kigo embeds the fleeting moment in the circle of seasons. Since a circle has no beginning or end, each moment recurs to an infinite number over the course of limitless time. The annual cycle becomes a metaphor for an eternal cycle. The haiku moment is timeless, because of its eternal recurrence in circular time.


While Nietzsche coined the term, "eternal recurrence," the idea is perennial. Thousands of years before him, King Solomon had written:


"To everything there is a season . . . . what is to be already has been" (Ecclesiastes 3: 1-15).


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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Aug 23, 2023
Replying to

Lev,

very well said; hope this becomes a published article!

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mona bedi
mona bedi
Aug 22, 2023

Post #1


war rubble no place to call home


Feedback appreciated:)

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