open sky :: SAMVAAD |14th May
- sanjuktaa
- May 14, 2023
- 1 min read
hosts : Sanjuktaa Asopa & Kashiana Singh
unfolding mimosa I let myself out of me
---- Rashmi Vesa
( THF kukai June 2020, 3rd place)
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hosts : Sanjuktaa Asopa & Kashiana Singh
unfolding mimosa I let myself out of me
---- Rashmi Vesa
( THF kukai June 2020, 3rd place)
Nice choice, Sanjuktaa. Congrats, Reshma. Very nicely done. <> <>
Mine:
the struggle to get a lily to stay in water after all Roadrunner: issue X:3
It was Scott’s Favorites from 2010, where he begins the commentary with this para: It seems we’re finally starting to see connections, relationships, and nods to our own English-language haiku literature, done with depth, artistry, and heart instead of the emptiness and transparency of a bad joke or pun (or an attempt at connecting to an ancient haiku/hokku which more often than not simplistically comes across as tired, formulaic, and/or over-used).
Here, at least for this reader, the allusion points to Nick Virgilio’s lionized lily . . . out of the water, out of itself Ramesh’s…
In my haiku journey I've come across quite a few haiku inspired by Nick Virgilio's well-known one; but I thought this one stood out because of its slightly different and riveting approach.
Here is what Rashmi had to say:
Insecurities,diffidence and constraints nurtured by negativity keep many of us chained to ourselves.Many of us continue to dwell in ourselves through our entire lifetime.However there sometimes occurs a reawakening through a touch of confidence or through intense introspection or self activism or through the efforts of a counsellor leading one outside of the barriers of the mind.
This is very good, and a well-deserved win. It's unlayered in its simplicity, and yet has the depth and karumi that makes for a well-seasoned haiku.
Relatable!
Very nice, Rashmi. Took me again, on a journey through the eyes of Nick Virgilio.
after the bell
within the silence
within myself
lily
out of the water
out of itself