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HAIKUsutradhar : 26th May 2023

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

Lev Hart, the MENTOR for HAIKUsutradhar, would be pleased to answer your questions and concerns.


hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of May: Subir Ningthouja

Textual prompt


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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Priti Aisola Reid Hepworth Sanjuktaa Asopa

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Associate Editors, K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar stepped down earlier in the year for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in one day /24 hours ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. 5. Most importantly, please do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem to be posted. ....................................................................................................................................

Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies and contest winners that were published elsewhere will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


openHALL Welcome back! to this space where we create our own prompt, own verse!


Today is the last Friday of this month! and we offer openHALL to open up your muse. You are also welcome to freewheel as that is what openHALL is all about! Either way, do pour in!

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kashiana.singh
kashiana.singh
03 jun 2023

#2 3rd June


your ashen face

another collapsed

star


would love feedback! Was reading about Carl Sagan who said we are all "stardust"

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the stories

or the science?

spring rainbow


#3


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samir satam
samir satam
01 jun 2023

#1 - 1st June 2023


edit 1 - thanks @Neha R. Krishna for your inputs.


pouring

in my cup ...

the rain


original:


the kettle pours

tea in my cup ...

rain in a bamboo grove


samir satam


(critique is welcome)

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samir satam
samir satam
02 jun 2023
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Thank you, Katherine :-)

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
31 may 2023

#1---31May23


Revision:


tuberose


Original:


enough said tuberose


---Billie


feedback welcome


(Of course, I'm tipping my hat to master haijin Cor van den Heuvel with this little experiment.)

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mona bedi
mona bedi
01 jun 2023
Contestando a

Not sure of this. I liked the earlier version

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angiola inglese
angiola inglese
31 may 2023

I appreciated 's suggestion Billie Dee , but I thought the first version was closer to my feeling . so I leave the original as the final version. Thank you .


#1


sleepless night-

a flight of midges

in the lampshade Feedback

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angiola inglese
angiola inglese
01 jun 2023
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Billie,did you read my response to your comment? I don't know what to choose.....they look a bit different to me, but both work.

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